lemme freestyle n' check it..feedback plz
 

yo this rhymes is like a bullet being defelcted in your direction
its as dope as ever ...its like a tupac resurrection
the king of rap has been reincarnated
from tupac to jambo ..both names are gold plated
this is a special delivery...open it up and *BANG*
this rhyme leaves u drained..its like gettin sucked by draculas fang
hang on...my styles projected like a missile or rocket
hair stands up on end as if u were fucking around with bare sockets
dont approach me..and I wont approach u
u dont want the triple threat on ur conscience..coz we capable to roast u
U think its a miracle...my rhymes are physically lyrically addictive
like the latest drug u own...my styles cryptic
logic better than a mensa expert
my rhymes spit clearer than one extra insult
the flames gone out? im here to rekindle
u left in a spin as u read this like a windmill

this was surprisingly nice. ya flow was tight throughout and ya got in sum nice bars in there. though usin 2pac as a reference just bores me but wateva. i kno it was a freestyle but try puttin in sum multis and this'd be straight. anyway CUZ RETURN THE FAVOUR CHECK MINE BANGKOK BUSINESS

that was hot, keep doing your thing

uppin

more feedback needed

man i wasnt feelin it...but then again im just an asshole critic...work on the structure of your lines...add some complexity...no disrespect dunny but you need to touch up on your shit...one

was a nice spit jambo,its just dont go refering yourself as the next tupac,youll have fanatics jumpin on your ass from all over,and beleive me those freaks are annoying,keep elevatin..

bismillah

HERES A THOUGHT INSTEAD OF COMING HOME FROM SCHOOL GETTING ONTO RAPBATTLES.COM AND WRITING SOME WACK ASS SHIT LIKE THIS, KILL YOURSELF..

Or get banned...

Caps locked on you? Shift your style. Bitch.