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Saladin 04-10-03 11:50 AM

The Crusader Is Here...--1st Script--
 
Ominous-dominance, I’ve often-taught-against-the promise-of-apocalypse..
The problem-is my-providence I’m fatherless..
Autonomous, Masjid's and their prominent-monuments..
And a flawed-intent to model-its-occupants..
The populous…….has surely altered-its-documents..
Soon to be destroyed with innocuous-offices..
My coffin-is-a-compliment……straining to regain…. my positive-cautiousness..
Knowledge-is-a-confident-consciousness…..an opulent-metropolis-of-consequence..
Knowing God-forgives when rock bottom-hits in a fraudulent-nauseous ness..
I'm lost-in-it, for the sake-of-peace I remain-at-ease..
When the venomous fangs-unleash in sacred-speech..
Condemning fake-beliefs, I blame-the-beast for this age-of-feast that hatred-brings..
Our lives, wrapped in an idea far from love…..and yes, hate-deceives..
Create-relief in blatant-dreams..
Used in a quaint-repeat to sustain-belief in a faithless-seed..
A faceless-me, walking aimlessly to claim-defeat..
Never misinterpret kindness-for-weakness..
In a mindset-that-preaches, a humble, but righteous-completeness..
Enlightened-by-each of, the disciples-in-seek-of .......a crisis-that-meets-us at holiness..
Survival-depletes-us, knowing-this…..bible-beseeches our loneliness….loneliness..

Peace
onE

WORD~PERFECT 04-10-03 11:51 AM

yo im feeling this god

Saladin 04-10-03 12:12 PM

Thanks Dawg

Atetrack define' 04-10-03 12:53 PM

shit was aiight cat,had osme nice multis and a almost constantly steady flow,keep spitting...peep my shit sometime,lookin for comments...

bismillah

Saladin 04-10-03 03:51 PM

uPPin This For All You Sleeeeeeeepyyyy Headzzzzzz

Und3fyned 04-10-03 07:22 PM

I think the vocab and multis are what make this peice tight, but at the same time they drag it down.

I really like this line:
The populous…….has surely altered-its-documents..
Soon to be destroyed with innocuous-offices..

But some of the other parts of this peice become "cloudy" because of and "overuse" of vocab. Had parts been kept more simple, I think that the overall of your work would've been better and your message more clear.

Tha Linez Drawn 04-11-03 12:13 AM

It's good...real good...but it's hard to know where you stand...tha bible or tha Masjid...which one?

Saladin 04-11-03 04:55 AM

^^

see my dads christian..it was just me n my moms we converted like 8 years ago..its sum complicated shit lol

kmfrob 04-11-03 05:46 AM

the topic on this is tight but i gotta admit its hard to follow. ya vocab was heavy and ya flow was pretty tight. id like to hear sumfin like this in audio cos i aint heard too many crusader pieces b4 itd be a nice change.

Anyway cuz RETURN THE FAVOUR AND CHECK MINE BANGKOK BUSINESS aight peace

grimey won 04-11-03 08:35 PM

i wipe ma fuckin ass wit chure freestyle, cuz u dun even know whut half tha words mean. This is rappin, not taking up yur mutha fuckin english homework. I can't even choose where u stand, just like u can't choose a fuckin religion. I didn't want beef mutha fuckah but u posted an' open mic, so i gotta give ya beef.

G_Gizmo.Guz 04-11-03 08:56 PM

yo saladin...you fuckin wannabe Malcolm... who the fuckz is you nigga ? that was the lamest shit ever!!!! HA HA.... your the rappin version of the bible... nigga go to church and priest
BY ANY MEANS NECESSARY

Saladin 04-12-03 07:40 AM

^^^

I smell pussies

BlackLion 05-05-03 02:22 PM

Some parts i was feeling and others I wasn't, overall, it was good.

~RuThLEss~ 05-05-03 02:37 PM

LOOOOOL My boy SALADIN i didnt know.....FUCK them Pussy's haters.......MAsha allah dawg Sick Piece am feelin the wordplay....and the contend is sick

Saladin 05-05-03 05:13 PM

Thanks dunz..

damn this is an old spit lol


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