Life(feel me or not, its real)
 

Stressed, i reverse my state of mind
the times change as i watch the days fly
making enemys and they dont even know me
see me,want to be me, hold me down, they cant hold me
remaining quiet
still getting on my knees at night
asking God to help a nigga get it right
trying to see with sight beyond my natural eyes
cant penetrate the disquise of the face, the mask lies
i see i been blind, swallowed in my past life
holdin rage and hate like twin 45's on my side
with life and death in the power of my mind.
drowin in my pain, rolin dice in lifes game
found pleasure and pain to be one and the same
cant explain
why where bound to this dark fate
6 deep in eternal sleep, when ur a slave to the grave your truly free
trading places
no one remains in the the grave kid
in this book called death, life's the first few pages..

Give a nigga some feedback

why yall sleepin, holla back with some thoughts

i aint gunna sleep like every 1 dose me and you

yo shyt was tight just up the vocab and your srt8

Still upping for som more replies, dont sleep goddam it

I liked it ... the first short one I've read today and you did it nicely. Vocab was there and there was a flow to it... OoNnEe

hey sup
not bad i like the concept but
i didn't really feel the vocabulary i just think
you should open up more show more of you're self
you knwo what i mean because i mean i understood you but
not everything you were feeling but not bad drop keep dropping

it was cool maybe if u upgrade ya vocab just a lil bit it'll b str8

i feel you

Nice contend......tight poem

Short, at times sharp and quite powerful...

...a bit 'blah' at times...but i felt it overall...

....nothing more to say...

....resp....

Peace, i hear yall, thanks im a keep working

still uppin for more thoughts