robbery flawed
 

--calling all units.. there's a robbery in progress at 1850 st.clair avenue.. please respond, top priority.. suspect is to be considered armed....--
--beat starts--

damn, how'd this shit happen, sirens surroundin' the building I'm trapped in.//
need an escape rout, gotta scape out with tha weight now.//
I ain't come this far to just lay down, I'm-a blaze rounds before I'm-a give up.//
live up to my name, if I don't make it, well.. 'least I ain't locked up in a steel cage.//
cold cell for my cold self commitin' a point blank homicide with a cold caulked gage.//
I told the bitch on the floor is where she should stay.//
she moved, what can I say... I had to do it.//
it's all part of the game when you lootin', pillagin' comes with the need for a gun, and guns are for shootin'.//
I was so stupid, I just got a lust for bucks.//
I need cash, addicted to paper stacks, havin' pockets fat without liftin' a hand at a 9 to 5.//
when I walk up in a case the adrenalin makes me feel so alive.//
like fucking for the first time, it's pure pleasure.//
the power, it over-powers, knowing you the one holding the cards is like a whole other level.//
hoping you never get caught, but it's only a matter of time.//
I slipped up, lord.. I prey, is it my time.//
am I destine to die before I even see the blue of the sky.//
will I be rushed and busted by shots fired from glocks in the hands of cops.//
another life taken, another statistic of a robbery flawed.//
damn, I wish I just won the lottery draw.//

I Didn't Qwite Undaztand the Flow. The Topic was Good, Yoo Stayed on Topic but Vocab Lacked. Was a Nice Piece All in All.

uppin'

why the fuck are people sleeping on hottness..

people really need to start taking pills to stay AWAKE.....

well the topic is played to my knowledage about 5 heads in here now have a topical up about robbery and second ya need to change ya rhyme-scheme its sorta confusion and punchs wouldnt hurt in this type of topic neither

just my .02$

it's a complex rhyme scheme.. like it has to be performed a certain way to sound right.. and it was a story, so there's no need for punches... good battle by the way.. another fuckin' loss on my record...

why is it half the replies on my posts are me uppin'.. you people really gotta stop sleeping..

yo, I liked this piece.
the topic is a little played, but you did it well. I thought the apb at the start was a pretty dope idea, not very origional but it worked.. stay poppin' dawg

" I aint come this far just to lay down" My sentiments exactly... nice peice.. OoNnEe