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The Necromancer 04-17-03 02:30 PM

An Odd Thought
 
Just trying out a different style I developed while I should be doing by math homework instead of fantasizing about chicks with dicks.

An Odd Thought

There are nine chambers in the desert eagle called Hell
A bullet named beelzebub whispers in your ear
Progeny of the dark shadow, children of the night
Seven days in a week, and seven sins for your soul
Coincidence?

Build containment of words to mirror our life energy
And a flower wilts in dark fear of the sun like light
Rays of dawn to praise the man who makes our life better
But evil runs through the hand of any kind of man
Malevolence?

The woman with a phallus is just a fantasy
Mine that I see, indeed, Lust seems to dictate my mind
The helot of a girl, Is just imagination
But I want to go and please such a wonderful girl
Sexuality?

Accept insanity of the mind forgive me
Forgive my heart and forgive my eyes, I have just sinned
But to seek retribution is to seek the darkness
It is all around. Moon, sun, Earth, sky, who wants it though?
Just only me.

AngelicSheShe 04-17-03 03:28 PM

lol I recommened you get back to studying..like this oculd really be a career.. lol j/p it was alright I could feel a flow to it though. But it still had parts where it caught my attention.. OoNnEe

shiznit 04-17-03 04:00 PM

hmmm...very classic....fresh flow i can say....i like it..keep em commin

varentao 04-18-03 10:06 AM

"This is SO you"....indeed, it is relative here...

But seriously, well executed piece...really delving into the deep darkness of yourself (and human 'nature' in general), through sexuality....

...so same as always, eh?...nah, you always seem to come at the 'darkness' in so many different ways...and even though the word 'darkness' maybe is obselete to sick fuks like me (but ESPECIALLY YOU!!!)...i guess society's norms n what not has to be apparent to at least some extent within us....

...or something like that...(!!!)...

...resp....

evilbombsquad 04-20-03 05:03 PM

^^^lol: ya sik fuks
but on the reel this was sik. i liked the structure leading sum well expressed emotions to open a 1 word question. biGG upS on that first verse ya brought sum crazy connections and that devil tip in a gun description was off the hinges. all 4 verses were well thought up wth nice wordplay.

stAy up


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