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I CANT SEE THA HUMOR WHEN A MAN DROPS, THATS A WASTED FUTURE
CAUSE DEATH IS COMMING BUT IF YOU STRAPED IT WILL BE HERE SOONER
CONSISTS OF RUMORS
THA FIGHT BREAKS U CANT HESITATE
CLOSED FATE CLOSED CASKETS AND YELLOW TAPE
THESE FELLOWS HATE I DRY MY TEARS AND FACE MY FEARS CAUSE EACH LYRIC IS LIKE A BULLET JUST PIERCED UR EARS

the fuck...man work on your shit yo...and if i'm not wrong you posted this piece of shit rhyme that needs a lot of work twice...i dont think its good for your reputation to post a wack ass drop twice, then again i'm just an asshole critic...wahid

what this dude said^

first off put your raps in bars in order to make them easier to read. secondly, never type a verse in blocks coz it looks dumb like you're trying to shout of something. thirdly, verse should really be long than this, at least 16 bars for a decent read. fourthly, you should picka clear topic in order to be creative and push your rhymes in that direction. fifthly, you should avoid using played out lines and rhymes whenever possible.

etc.