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shorty0069 04-19-03 11:23 PM

Away
 
The wind has taken you
You're free finally at peace
So still you lie
Leaving your cares behind
The pain is gone
Gone with the spirit in your eyes
Now you're wandering around
Above us
Looking downward
As we cry

You've flown into the wind
Escaping all the hurt within
Took to the sky
Leaving the world behind
So young to die
How could you let it all pass you by

And to the wind go so many dreams
That you had inside
Now you're just a memory
Burning in my mind

So young to die
How could you let life pass you by
And now you'll never know I loved you
And now you'll never know I cared

Legendary 05-18-03 06:15 PM

You should have upped this one to get responses for it. I was looking back for more of DaGyrlRemarqabL's posts and saw no one responded to this one, so I thought I would.

This one was very emotional. I felt that so much in the first stanza, and got more of it through the rest.

"Gone with the spirit in your eyes
Now you're wandering around
Above us
Looking downward
As we cry"

That was very good right there. If I was much of a crier, that part might have got me. When I read it I pictured someone I knew in that situation so it got to me a little bit.

"So young to die
How could you let life pass you by
And now you'll never know I loved you
And now you'll never know I cared"

I liked that part right there. Was a very good ending to it. It was a reminder to myself to tell family how I feel in case something happens to me or them. I'm glad I came across this.


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