battle type verse
 

like a new fruit i'm fresh in this
try to step to this and i'll twist ya neck like that chick from the excurcist
i'll wreck this shit like i dont have a designated driver
i'm tighter, try to attack Lunk but ya miss like a hesitatin sniper
my saliva attacks heads like a piledriva
say you better than me? well i dont like those kind of liars
now watch as the mastermind sacrifices anyone who lacks the rhymes
then crack ya spine like a cyropractor and ask ya if ya back is fine
see i'm spiritually intact and i've been lyrically enhanced
i'm the realest while yall is fake like silicone implants...

if you read, plz reply

The flow is real good, easy to catch::::::;;

However the punches aint that hard....if its a battle verse you should spend most of your energy on clownin your opponent, not talking about yaself.....

Other than that it has potential, so keep it up

i liked it

Thats good man, short but sweet, if you added some hard hitting punches with that in a battle it'd be tops...

Peace Out Yo!!!!

ya, it was for kapones lil thing of rapbattles battle verses or somethin. also, i didn't wanna use some really good punches on nobody na mean? but thanks for the feedback so far

uppin

lunk punches r the heart of it all wit out em ull lose use as little fillers as possible concentrate on punches n personality
100.. still good verse all in all

yer the shit was aiight lunk,was too short but!wanna see more cat,more!,i can see that lil spit building its self up slowly to the poin twhere the line ends with liars,then exploding out real fast with a tight ass battle beat going,itd be crazy if you kept the flow up...
nice
bismillah

Mad Props kid, flow was tight, great vocab, short but Off The Meat Rack

i hate to repeat everyone elses shyt but yea yur punches is whuts gonna do it for yu, keep rhymin tho.
you really was almost on to somthing wit that exercist line.
next time try somethin like: flow circles around yur shyt/
make yur head spin like dat exercist chick/
i dont kno dawg jus bullshitten keep it up.

thanks for the feedback ppl!!

that shit was tight dawg i see potential in you

ay yo can you give me feedback on my verse "i lost my mind part 1,2, and 3"

nice
 

Good shit doggy.

i dont think this was very good at all. iv been doin this for a long time (ignor the # of posts) and ive probably seen this verse re done 100 times. If your not going to punch hard then why punch at all? If your not going to put out your best effort everytime then why waste the space on the board. You have potential but you will have to break away from every other "mad rappin text battler" before you will get props from me.

elevate son