I promise
 

i wrote this for my girl fon our one year, i need some feedback before it comes up so i be sure it is any good. So any criticism would be great thanks.

I PROMISE
i promise you my love
i promise you my heart
i promise you my life
i promise we'll never be apart

i promise not to hurt you
i promise to never make you cry
i promise to always trust you
i promise not to lie

i promise you forever
i promise you tonight
i promise you my respect
i promise to do things right

i promise to always be there
i promise until the end
i promise to always love you
i promise to be your best friend

i promise you my love
i promise you my life
i promise you forever
i promise our love is my life

come on i need some feedback here people

Hahahah comedy...with saddam n bush..hahaha

Nice i didnt know you did poems...i felt the emotions in this piece nice drop dawg

And nice battle vs Mountain unfortunatly he wont be joinin us...lol

unfotunatly? i never wanted that kid to join

this not that bad...but if you gonna recite this out loud to your chick, then you might wanna spice it up a lil...it lacked sum floe...

but the point was put across...so this was a nice poem...

she'll feel it...