Triflin [0-0] vs Unemceeable [0-0]
 

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Vote By....Tuesday


Topic

liquid breathe

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liquid breathe?..........hmmmm/////// whateva

lol, I dont get the topic..But Checkin In..

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I don't get this topic either: Oh well::: as long as we both don't know::::::: lol

Da fuck are we gonna talk about..

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Yeah I tired to drop some shit during school today but the only interpatation I can make form liquid breathe is breathing under water.........

yeah so ummmmmmm

okay....i hope I can figue this out so it works:::::::::::::::::

Setting the scene:::::::::::::::::
Joe's a construction worker::: Its a hot summer day and Joe has drank alot of water
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Bottle after bottle Joe drowned without question...
Constantly quenching thirst until his body made a suggestion/

"Release Me....Relive Me of this Stress"

But to reach his destination Joe needed to cross what seemed like a mountain...
Now he's wishing he wasn't working on the floor where they just installed the fountain/

*Sounds of POURING water in the background*

Making his way down the floors...he uneasily steps...
hoping not to disturb Nature and release his breath/
the closer he gets to his goal the higher the stress...
full to the brim...Nature pushes her call out as sweat/
Joe reaches the bottom floor but his portable chruch is gone...
Worried Joe must find a place to repalce Pastor John/

Its been a long day for Joe...oh how they did him so wrong...
Johns not at the work site...Joe's been holding his breath so long/
He's beginning to question faith...searching for his porcelian god...
hoping Nature made a mistake...and that this call is a fraud/
in the distance Joe spots John hidden behind a wall...
hurriedly he walks ready to answer Nature's call/
and when he reaches his destiny... and his Lord is unvieled...
Joe is Faced with only Two Commandments: "Un-Zip" and "Exhale"


Ehhhh.......Pretty good for Liquid Breathe...
HAHAHAA LMFAO I think this is funny.........

Umm...if u don't get it you are an idiot

EDITED WRITING IN BOLD

A Man At War, Searching For His Liquid Breathe!



Well, Shit.. Here goes..


I traveled thousands of miles For me to walk threw this Fog
Dehydrated body breakin Down From this desert Mirage
Viewing the Lord, Painted Pictures Of War. Ran Out Of Breathe
Empty Sounds Threw His Flesh, Foul Scents, Rain Drops Condence
Will Christ Bend. Thinking Life Ends,He Saying, Lord Lead the Way
Before Me 2day, I give faith in You, Thanks Now i See The Way.
Pools and Streams, Its Cool Think, That there is a Form Liquid
Torn To Get It, Alone And Frigid. Blessed By Blood, Thats Rinsen.
The lord Has GiVen, Second Chances. For Men to live
Oceans On Fire, Its rosten inside ya, Think! Apacalypse
Imagin Enhanced Minerals For The Pure Extinct Level Events
In need of cooling Down, Wit Duels an Rounsd The Devils In Him,

Clouds Cover, In an Enormous abundance Of his Views.
Wit No CanTinE to Use, Poor Kids Running On Fumes
Funny How The Earth Looms, Elimated The Skies Then Presume
A Passing Storm, in a Everlasting Form, Life will Be Gone.
Divide And He Falls, Cause he cant Keep The Strength.
Searching for banks, Of Water. Yet He Draws Blank.
Moving Slower and Slower, He comes to a Hault.
Lightning And Bolts, Rain Dropes And Answers His Everlasting Hope
He Didnt Die,if it wasnt for Mother's Nature Many Friends will Bleed Of Quench
Only to awaken And keep His Journey With Energy, Will Call this Liquid Breathe

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Pretty nice Trif, Lets see some votes

I felt yourshit 2..Crazy Topic though..lol

...Good job working with the topic....

both of you expanded nicely. i was feeling both
concepts a lot. it was a very good battle but i think
unemceeable takes this because his imagery painted
a little bit better of a picture. and i liked his storyline.


good job both of you....

V. Unemceeable

both were good but i thought that unemceeable used the topic better.

vote=unemceeable

Fiori

vote=unemceeable

vote = unemceeable

they were both REALLY good, it was a hard decision. i like unem's a little more tho

my vote is for unemceeable if it's ok i'll post a explanation in the morning