The Corner
 

Corner Story

Yall know i like rythmin n tellin stories...
Hope you get into the story line....Enjoy



I'am chillin on the corner Steps, listenin to "MY" tape cassette//
my niggas hearing that shit, they showing me mad respect//
this nigga walking by made a stupid comment and almost got me vexed//
i was about to go put this nigga in check, my niggas told me to chill for a sec//
i chilled, went in the house grabbed my gun, you can guess whats going down next//
i followed that nigga home, walk up to the door holding the chrome//
kick the door in, i dont need nobody to let me in//
walked in, muthafuckaz know Alpha be illin often//
seen his little sister in her play pin, it's sad thats going to be her future coffin//
shot the little slut, rush-up the stair case still feelin mad as fuck//
gun was tuck under the black and silver linen//
seen his room, open the door, saw him, and shot him in the leg of his denim//
he bleedin and yelling, im still mad, i put the gun to one of his limbs//
looked in his face and i noticed that it wasnt him//Ahahahah oppz my bad....lol
i calmed down, he still was yellin like a bitch, he ask me where was his sis//
i aint answer, just looked at him n told him she didnt make it//lol
he started wiling out, saying fowl shit about me out his mouth//
he made me flipped again, shot his ass in the head n left his brainz hangin out//...muthafucka shoulda have shut up...lol..he seen my face he had to go anywayz...lol

uppin for replys^^^

that flowed dope, except for the guns, shouldve been more creative, unless it was a past experiance...............or sumtin

was a tight flow,nice rhymes throughout but i aint into the guns and shit,no biggie cat jsut aint my thing nahmena,but still i enjoy story rhymes and you do em mad well,niceness.
bismillah

This was ill...
the flow was dope..
keep it coming fam..

peace
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nice wordplay
 

i was feelin this drop to da fullest , , keep spitting dawg ,

nice drop tho i aint in2 DAT kinda violence.Decent...Stay ^
-Avi

ummm....nice. I liked your style, but I'm not into that sort of violence. It gave me the impression you keepin a dark secret. But, all together, I liked it. peaz. Keep it up.

.On Point.
 

I liked how the spit flowed... at first the scheme seemed a little elementary, then you ripped it. Uppin' this joint...

it was a pretty nice drop...but the begginin was kinda boring but you picked it up at the end...you was on some real crazy Eminem murdah shit haha...but pretty nice kid...OUT

thanx for the feed back...next story i wont do GUNZ...:)

das tite alpha haha puttin it down for SA stay up fam

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Nice peice.. Violence is ok as long as you can desribe it with feelings ya know?

When you going to drop for THP. I'd like to have you in the group. OoNnEe

nice, very nice... your ryme and your style mix in well my friend..keep on typing dope shit..

Nice Ryhmes n Shit keep postin , but as the rest of um said you need some creativity in your ryhmes