some aggressive retorts, point me in a direction of the kool flow.
 

oh........../
well gee hehe here we go again/
looks like i got me alittle white boy faggot/
stupid maggot/
you come round here refusing to battle/
wise move G/
yo come shoot me/
raise your A.K/
shoot me in the head/
wo yo im dead/
but guess what/
ITS ALL IN YO HEAD/
blah blah bling bling/
dude ima come round yo hood/
suck yo girls clit/
suck on het tits/
stupid dumb bitch/
as for yo momma/
man this all just gets dumma/
ima bumma/
make you a brother or sister/
some1 who will dist yu/
after dat/
ima find you/
complete my decronic on yo head/
make you wish u where dead/
or still in bed/
but you aint/
so here i b/
bitch ur livley hood is ended/
ur life got bended/

uh here comes another episode\
yo bro chill a min listen\
ok now i got yu listining pump up the volume\
yo brothers and sisters\
uh uh comon\
whatch me flow\
ok here we go\
yo i read yo @#%$\
you think you hit\
but yo u missed yall left yoself open to be DISSED\
so comon now im PISSED\
you think ur a rapstar gangsta\
bot yo u aint ur just a PRANKSTER\
so comon hoe read up about how i beat yo up\
hit you this way and that\
hell i even hit you wid my BAT\
bitch mutha @#%$ ima get you again for dat\
you just wanna be me\
or my boy rhymeee\
you think ur a homieee\
but yo ur just GRIMEEE\
you talk much more @#%$\
but your gunna get bit\
miss me hit me\
i dont care\
i can come back with much more flare\
and im bein fair\
you say ur dope rythem is nice\
ay yo i think u musta got headlice HAHA ima tell you one more time\
back up dont try yo @#%$\
ay yo mellowG\
u really trying me with yo melody\
i dont like it\
i cant feel it\
infact its @#%$ you talk\
well hell we could call u ja rule\
same old @#%$\
think u hit like him\
but missed like him\
so yo backup\
and whatch ur brother flow\
ur lifes going all rainy/
hell no you just met ZAINY!/.
yo\

Yo bruvvas and sista's help me out wid my cronic shit man, where b me going wrong?, i just cant feel my flow since my 1 year out and away. :confused:

!!WHACK!!!!
 

hahahahahhahahahahhahahahahhahahahahahhahahjahahah ahahhahahahahahhaha , , ,cant stop laughin , , , , honestly this was the whackest shit i ever read , , , whackest whackest whackest , , hahahahhahahahaha ,, whack , whack , whack ,, maddd whackkkkkkkkkkkkk , his lyrics were whack as fuck , man i only got one word for you , !!!!WHACK!!!

hmmm.....aight yo, u probably were in writas block r sumthn cause this needs sum work, dont tak it wrong i aint dissin on u, jus drop this side of u, and mak sum longa lines, it didnt fit togheta at all so try to even ur choice of words, then put sum wordplay, similies, and metophores in there and u'll only improve, much love playa.......peace

yo i read this and thought well this is pretty WACK SHIT and i thought that this was the wackest shit i eva read.........that was untill i found out that there was a second verse..........hahaah yes take it personally bitch u cant rap for shit......zainy if u wanna prove that u brainy then dont try n be a gansta online

I WAS GOING TO TELL YOU TO JUST STOP RAPPING BUT THEN I THOUGHT ABOUT IT.HERE IS SOME ADVICE :READ THE DICTIONARY EVERY NOW AND THEN,KEEP IN MIND THAT YOU ARE THE GREATEST RAPPER EVER,TRY TO DROP LYRICS OR STREET SHIT. GOOD LUCK.