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yeah yeah
Im a kill you with this rap tune// Drop a line so hard you be screaming for your heart pills// To say it more precisely "im a fuck you up"// Knock you about like you a muthfuckin tamberine// Make you scream like you just had a bad dream// If you think thats the end of it// Ive got bad news Ive only just begone// Im a beat you up just for the fun// Like when pacs killler holded that fucker of a gun// Im Hazardous// Im dangerous// Im the new femcee if your curious// If you cant rap dont worry// You just go on home// and make a living by trading baseball caps// I havnt got more skills than the war lord katz// But i have something and thats bettter than nuffin// Im feed up of being judged by my race// Next time you call me whitey your in for a big chase// I aint no wigga cos im not a wanabe nigga// Im no gangsta and im no a wanksta// Im just a femcee who wants to be a great rap MC// |
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decent drop.......dunno if its ur first one but was good attemp
need to structure it a bit better with the flow and rhyming..... |
thanx the rest usually diss me......cos when i make every word rymme they say im trying to be eminem......LOLOLOL.....Im just new so i jsut gotta get use to it....
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1. don't worry who they say ur trying to be like. it's better to rhyme every word than hardly any (like i saw above) try to elevate more, work on flow and punches. IE i think it shows skill if you can rhyme every word and have it make sense. also i wouldn't use the 'N' word. but then again that's my 2 cents.
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like dis...
Im a kill you with this rap track// Drop a line so hard you be screaming that you having a major heart attack// To say it more precisely "im a fuck you up"and brother an sister you know dat i got a gat in my back pack// Knock you about like iM SMOKING CRACK// Hommie it isnt a threat but im being deadly serious when I say watch your back// I know im not black but Ill beat your ass like im big daddy mack// You gonna wish that you said wasnt what you said because Im not whack// ETC....................... |
Decent drop ,,, need more vocab and metas though ,, tha wordplay was whack , , ,but overall , decent shit
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thank God yo, i didnt hear eminems name in dere once....haha, four things gurl: 1. 1.worplay,2.metaphores,3.similies,4.vocabulary,
u improvin kid jus lik i said, keep postin ...peace eazy ps dont eva use da ''N'' word again cos if u aint black, u aint spoused ta use dat word, and if u were freestylin in front of black people and u said dat shit, theyed fuck u up, badly, |
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i liked it...keep on spittin
KEEP HOLDIN DOWN CITY LIFE TO holla at ya kid |
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Those lines were extremely whack ,,,, work on ur lyrics dawg |
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why aint u goin home then |
jus playin....haha
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was it me or did that not rhyme at all?
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Was It Me Or Was That Shit?!?
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methane you got a lot to say when you have posted 415 and ur battle status is 0-0
Why dont we battle and maybe your status will change 0-1 |
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