yo check ths out ..........hit me up
 

Professional, uppen the decibel a decimal above
Extraterrestrial audible vessels
For blood audible missiles and vocal dismissals
Like Pistols, Tearing through emcees skeletal bristles
Beneficial, Ripping in the kids brain tissues
Leaving them a bit retarded with personal issues
Personal miss-use, of my tracks is tested deadly
Infest the steady, when my tracks oppress the ready
To floods the brain like cocaine ingested heavy
And less than every, bit of protection when testing benny
I've battled plenty, and everyone is rattle empty
Without a skeleton to hold 'em up they had to temp me
And then correctly, spitting at me like a Jetski
Go ahead and press me, bones crunch like nestle
Arrest me, Sentence me and lock me away
So the streets can be safe for emcee's to play
By the way, when i spit don't get hit by a stray
Cause every random word i say can shatter your vertebrae
Every verb i spray, is a miss-call herb away
Word play, that will keep emcee's on the curb all
In a verbal way, I get violent and kill quick
To define me kids make up words like "Ill-Sick"
Whose a relic, wack emcee's heads are real thick
So the target is big, my metaphors will stick

tight vocab G, flowed iight, overall i liked it after i found a speed to read it at,,,,,,, nice drop dawg keep dis shit up.

thanx dawg! i got mad respect fo ya !

13ad{habbit}- yeo this is tight sway u kewl o yea this is ur bro .....u did tight

its good but not for a battle piece. work on more punches

sway sway sway.....i agree u did good but go at a good enough speed dogg...lol i like ur rhymes they tight but from the real though damn homie u gonna get in a crew......ur bro 13ad{habbt} baby!

sway work on ur punches dawg , , ,, ,

Its true ya punches need work but you got a tight flow dog

yo yalll im new here! now what the fuc is punches?

Tite drop...nice wordplay...ILL vocab...punches were ok

Punches - mostly disses to tha opponent ur battlin

Return tha favor n give some feedback ta my shit:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=43879

"I LEAD, YOU FOLLOW, cant think for yourself cause your head is hollow/
Couldnt even get a record deal from apollo/
couldnt win the battle if you sucked up the judge and swallowed/"



To quote myself.....lol.

A battle rap is aiming directly at your opponent and dissing him.

You got alright flows so holla if you ever wanna battle. :)

SwaY that was Tight nigg-E

yo wordplay is tight but you gotta work on punches get them in and yo ready fo battle aight

check out ma battle wit young dee holla

peace