"Show Me SOme Lov" first song i ever made
 

Verse 1: Smack dis, clap dis, show some assets/ U got da tattics, i'm seein some asses/ This girl wanted a boy, she said she wanna holla/ She said she wanted a fuckin' dolla/ Said ya name is Suzy, said u got a Uzi, uthink u can feel me, u got no feelings/ I got tha Dope that niggaz will smoke, it'll give ya no hope, I'll c ya when i Rock Tha Boat...

(chorus repeat 2x)
Dancin in da club....Show me some lov, Dancin in da club...Show me some Lov

Verse 2: Baby shake that ass, let fuck in that grass, cuz ya know its class, u got a phat ass/I would like to roc tha boat, cuz u know i float/ It tastes like candy, white boyz say dandy, i'll some hammy, man u can't slam me/I got tha Weed that made from seeds, it from ain't pee/Cuz i always roc Nike...

(chorus repeat 2x)
Dancin in da club....Show me some lov, Dancin in da club...Show me some Lov

(Hook)
Baby shake ya ass, ya assy, shake if off (repeat 3x)

(chorus repeat 2x)
Dancin in da club....Show me some lov, Dancin in da club...Show me some Lov

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its my first demo, so don't hate it, give a brotha some lov and respect. and i'm NOT bein racist, so don't say dat either...........:cool:

thats tight man, some parts were good. just work on your material lil bit

thanx

this shit was WHACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, , hahahahahha , , u used simple lyrics , u had no wordplay , , no shit , , ,, , , , , this drop was really WHACK

i know, read tha top, my first demo....duh!

let battle Bash, u talk all that shit, let's go, setup

iight u want me too set it up

man Bash you "Bash" on everyones shit lol.... it was good for ur first rap. The thing that i would suggest is to use better wordplay.

thanx yo finally some one who judges right

benz lets do dis , , , ,checkout front lines , , i set it up there , , , ,go spit ur verse

wanna battle Illusionist? u setup

bitch u fuckin dumb, , , , fuckin gay ass mah fucka , , get ur ass out of here , , ,, you ask me too battle u , , , , now u askin me if i wanna battle illusionist , , ,, , nigga u a fuckin dumb ass bitch

fuck u bitch! let battle wigga! u setup fool

....c'mon illusionist....u kno rap..ur a vet...u cant tell me dat shit was good .....i dont give a fuck if this was his first time writin rhymes....shit was whack....but an opinion is an opinion....

i did set it up dumbass