Lets start ova
 

My explisit lyrics//
so versitial, just fear it//
I further my horizon//
A bright new emcee//
the sun is just risin//
his mind is empty//
as blank as the pages in his rap book//
time is frozen//
its as if every single lyric he picks is carefully chosen//
spit so frequently he has to keep reloadin//
Every peice of energy is expressed so heavly//
his mind cant process, so eventually//
He just breaks down mentally//
Resorting to drugs//
he used to gettin a bunch of hugs//
now its just jugz of shrugs//
a life that hit the brink//
a person who cant think//
now instead of rappin he is forced to go to shrinks...to be continued

I hope I made up for my 1st one hit me back!

dawg dis was short, vocab was limited, their was next 2 no elavting, but their was iight flow.

make yo shit longer, elavate use bigger words and varied words, but keep da flow going, dis shit is tuff man, i hope to see some dope shit from u fosure soon, keep writin.

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cheak dat out dawg, much luv

yo flowwas tite but yea it was short ! n u sound like a lil baby sayin I hope I made up for my 1st one hit me back ! dawg sometimes u have a down n sometimes u have a up ! i have up n downs sometimes u screw up cause of brain freezze ! but werd ! dont worry bout u ctach up !