no luv
 

trying to share things that i keep down in my core,
but sometimes i feel like i'm just blocked and ingnored,
so its get me thinkng what the fuck am i writing this for?
i like to write, like to fight lyrical battles where the pen is my might
but i have a flow i would like to show, do ya think itz alright?
a'ight, i get it, i'm just not gettin it, cause you ain't feelin it,
i'm writin' shit worse, than vanilla ice is singing it
i'll take my blows, rob a hoe, get off the show and won't come back no mo'
is that what you want? is that what you get?
i'm trying my best y'all you ain't feeling this yet?
that's alirght, i don't care if you don't give a fuck about me
i don't care if y'all want me to leave
just think of Rabbit when he got booed off stage,
they came back winning, spitting out all of his rage
so look out there might be a comeback
so sit back, and kick back, n' smoke crack, cause its whack
like these lines will be when i decide to write back

---DNV---

"i'm just kiddin people, you know i love you"

8-mile wanna be... lmfao, Rabbit got booed off stage but he had skill, that's how he came back and won.. you don't got skill.. you have an elementary scheme, elementary vocab, and a weak flow.. elevation is strongly recomended...

that's fine i'll take that... hence, the title, "no luv"
but i ain't no 8 mile wanna be... it was just a refence to "comeback" Rabbit got no luv, but when he came back, he did..
that's all...

thanx

i thought it was simple but alrite. the flow was good i read it rite the first time. sure he may have lost a lot compared to wins but theyre just battle scars. cant diss some1 for tryin even if it doesnt take ya there. i like his hope.

thanx for the vote of confidence...
check out "making a livin' " i like the hook in that one

yeah, a bit to simpilistic, although:
trying to share things that i keep down in my core,
but sometimes i feel like i'm just blocked and ingnored,

was nice but:
i'm writin' shit worse, than vanilla ice is singing it
makes you sound like an em wannabe!

keep elevatin though!

thankx rhythmic...

no kriticism from me... jus keep flowin dawg!!!

uppin for some feed back, good or bad... tell me what you think