yo man how can i improve this itz my first rap {peace}
 

ima just like a boulda i burn and kill/
i aint gona stop till u no im 4 real/
burn thow ur face like burning paper/
u no u wanna be scared i werse then vapa (vapa iz like da ardest person in ur area)
u no ur feelin me but u dont sea me,beleve me,uva mc~s dont c me/
u wouid nt wanna meet me/
my secend verse it getz werse nufin getz werse then this/
but no i aint got time 4 dat i just wanna ryhme and dat/
coz i ryhme wit such words peaple call me da dicshrnary/
i murder 21 line when im playin picshernary/
so anyways watch out i couid b cumin 4 u so u betta make sure ur in a badboy crew


i didnt have a lot of time plezzzzz rate me

Up your vocab and punches

o0oo and make it longer

more vocab well better vocab and punches

your flow was good

for a first time woz dat good thumz up or down

first you need to change that wack ass name

then you need to learn to spell

then you need waaaaay more vocab

and you need wordplay...

but for your first time you were ight ...i suggest you read this and try again...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=44110

u need to work on some more shit, alot