Take the Crown
 

yo this is my latest post. hope yall like it

yo some how some way im gone get to the crown
niggaz think they hurting me just by putting me down//
When spitomatic retire you bet im gone be the king
Im gone be nationally known on this whole rap thing//
The crown will be mine nigga however i have to get it
Either splittin ya wig, takin ya kids you bet im gone get it//
Fuckin with a true thug nigga like me
Is like a emperor being takin over by tyranny//
Thats some shit that noboady wishes to see
Im telling you now aint nobody fuckin with me//
My emcee life is all about takin the crown
If i kill you ya head might not be layin where your body is found//
Im here to take the crown thats the title you wish to borrow
I aint here to make friends im here to drown niggas in sorrow//

i didnt like this dawg ,,, u gotta up ur vocabulary ,,,,,,

thanks for the tips

multis son- check it if u say a couple lines, dont just rhyme tha last words of each, rhyme tha last two or three

ie yadaydayda hit-da-bong
yadaydayda spit-ya-song

thatll make ur shit a lil more complex
keep upin

thanks for the tips. Im trying to get better. I just started getting hooked on freestylin. Ill get better though