My Love
 

Im gonna love you till the day I die/
Fucked up things happen, asking myself "why?"/
Makin love poems for you, never stop, keep on flowin/
Like an energizer battery i just keep goin and goin/
Our love will last until the end of tyme/
but our love is too strong to be explained in a rhyme/

Sometimes my worlds messed up, but ure smiling, always there/
To me ure not a friend, ure like a big huggable teddy bear/
and we have memeroies we can always share, i know its right/
I fell in love with you at first sight/
always wanna hold you tight/
and never let go/
never stop my flow/
so.....I LOVE YOU.


Hey ya'll tell me waht ya think and also if ya can plz comment on "My theory on life". Thx peace out.:)

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I liked it i think it could have been longer to show the real emotion....other then that it was good

thx evil, ya i coulda made it longer...i'll do that next time

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is good...cept it would of been better if it was longer
is tite tho

love is like the center of poetry..however u wanna do it..it would turn out completely fine but i agree that if u made it longer...it would be much better...


nice one! keep em droppin!

Yea all that stuff they said but like shiznit said when its love it don't matter its always going to be good. And this was a cute peice no matter if it was short or not.

thx all be sure to check out my other poems

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This was OK..Simple in a lot of ways but good concept n message. I thought you could have ended it better, but overall was a sweet piece.
Stay up n keep elevatin.

definatly could have been longer but good for what u did put down. to help wit writtin more u couldve elaborated more on exactly what u were talkin about and even who, that way u left it could have been a girl, hip hop, music, a gun anything, but stil not bad...