Life in the HOOD :: hot drop ::
 

Break of dawn arrises this Mexican faces the horror of-the-hood//
mind reacts wanting to shut his eyes only if-he-could//
should stay home violence around escalating-each-day//
friends getting layed into thier grave getting killed-in-everyway//
courage has enough to go to school proceeds puts on his coloured-fitted//
cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded//
mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest//
scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next//
staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix//
family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix//
arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile//
skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial//
corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial//
police instigate color profiling begins was 2 caucasians that had-a-brawl//
Five~0 making coloured people-crawl Hand cuffed pushing us to make-us-fall//
Fuck them he says We-standing-tall Cops threatens i'mma hurt and jail-y'all//
Interigation-begins gets the point across causing the ruckus-were-caucasians//
people point first to inspect crime are blacks-&-mexicans//
plans for school gets cut short principal suspends for distractions//
life is filled with-demons they lurk and may end up to be-friends//
all this transpired in the life of Cliptik flex at days-ends//

constructive feedback much appreciated....:o :whacky:

nice story-tellin,kinda lost me a few times but overall it wuz dope.Stay ^
-Avi

^ thanks man appreciate it.....

uppin

ummmmmmmm , Ill story tellin , , i Liked ur word choice , your wordplay was Ill as alwayz , some of it was confusin , because ur lines were to long , , , so shorten up some of ur lines , , , , overall i give u a 8/10

thanks...... appreciate it uppin

...uppin

good stuff, but what hood are u from

I felt the piece it was cool. dawg keep postin

thanks appreciate the replies . what hood if u knew toronto u'd know rexdale is the pj there and thats where i reside at

uppin.....

dont sleep

ZZZZ

y'all sleepin on hotness

cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded//
mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest//
scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next//
staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix//
family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix//
arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile//
skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial//
corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial//

TIGHT ASS BARS DOG, FA REAL THIS ENTIRE PIECE WAS AWE INSPIRING NA MEAN...GOOD SHIT PEACE