wu type verse
 

i wrote this when listening to "triumph". personally i aint a fan of this but i figure i might as well get a second opinion.


this is the launtch of the a-bomb, the clan stays strong/
enough to begin this conquest and stay on/
my words leak toxins to infect the listener/
establishments crumble swiftly when we're dissing-a/
stainless steel iron will, remain undefeatable/
hinges rusty in my mouth, info is unleakable/
navigate the globe at terminal velocity/
no stopping me, event unfold, witness the prophesy/
stay on course, of course, the whole power source/
escaped at night from the evil trojan horse/
no love for the feeble, the nice are barred/
we coming up twice as hard to slice your guard/
while you tiddle thumbs non-stop from sexual frustriation/
relative newbies, but even vets think we're amazing/
the best ones out today son, to disrespect a nation/
better relax the best you can, your brain is due for penetraition/


blah.

not bad.....def has some Wu type influence....its all in the flow and pronunciation....keep goin

newbian

felt it johnny,i aint much of a wu fan but i got their albums,and that triumph beat ill never forget,its playin in my head as im reading this ,it definetly flowed with it nicely,nic elil job johnny

uppin like this ^^

stay on course, of course, the whole power source/
escaped at night from the evil trojan horse/

no love for the feeble, the nice are barred/
we coming up twice as hard to slice your guard/
thought that these lines were both ill. nice spit. keep up the good work. peace

this was alright, I didn't really like what was in it in terms of content. The flow was pretty good, and the vocab. Pretty good, but not amazing.
Peace

This was aight , , , ,, nuthin caught my attention........

i thought da content was jus aiiight but da flow was niice.

mos def one of my weaker pieces. cheers for the feedback people.

yeah yo.. I'm feelin' this wu-style.. Wu's da illness and you brought a nice flava to it..

"navigate the globe at terminal velocity/
no stopping me, event unfold, witness the prophesy/"

that was nice, sounded kinda like a blackalicious style bar but even still I liked it...

keep uppin' dawg.. 1

.Wu.
 

It did sound like Wu ta me. The wordplay was pretty vicious... Johnny, I don't know how you said you weren't feelin' this joint. Ha, ha... keep spittin' fire though.

uppin one last time. i notice some mixed opinions on this verse^^

i was feelin it...hadda Gza feel to it..

yo jonny i felt that that was a good drop
not bad man not bad ata ll keep it up yo
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