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B.R.E PRESENTS( Lady Tee) i'm the realest chick
well i'm that sexy girl you boys never met me before/ i walk pass yo mouth fall to tha fuckin floor/ i'm that hottie wit that pretty coke body/ don't play no games so baby boy don't try me/ i play ball, my games better than Scotty's/ you fuckin hattas need to go and use the fuckin pottie/ i like to get on you hattas you niggas and you fuckin hoes/ you step up to me my click gone start throwin blows/ this is rap battles bitch not freestyle friday/ so i cuse all i want so bitch don't you try it/ i have ya family readin about ya/ they'll be mad cause i beat the shit up out ya/ i'll beat ya so bad then i'll kick you in the mouth/ i'm from the south where we don't play no shit/ you mess wit my click then you gone get yo wig split/ you come to battle and you gone get yo ass kicked/ we'll hurt yall feelins so bad you'll be left so sick/ you'll get k.o by that shit that you hoes always spit/ i'm that girl lil'tee i know i am so thick/ wit my big ass and tits it leaves you niggas speechless/i love to tell you boys you can't touch this/cause lookin for a boy that knows i'm real lucious/
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......ILL drop..........good job
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it was ok..simple but i spoke about tha tin my last post ,on your last post....a word of advice,the use of the word fuck,motherfucker,and fucking sometimes go with what your saying,they are words used to express emotion ,and should be used only as a last resort,try to thnk of osmethign other then these words,unless you find it completly necesary...you will find alot of cats will thikn your lazy for using words liek that n you rrhymes...liek you rusign themt o fill gaps,and you havent put you rmind to the rhyme long enough to thin of something ele,do you get me??...i hope you do...th ejaws droppin tot he fuckin floor was an example,so many other words mightve been used to exprss that they beleive you are a pretty girl and fall head over heels when they see you...i hope you understand...it was a good rhyme,a decent effort,but it lacked work...if you work hard on you rhymes youll gain props respect form all corners,and become a better person and lyricist.....all this said....if you want to do a gangsta style its up to you entirely...but,i woul drecommend trying new things...hip hop is elevation...get back at me..
bismillah lucious<<thats a good word to use...the best word in the entire peice missy....keep at it. |
thanks for the advice
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