a verse about my baby
 

the first time i saw i had to look at u twice
u sweeter that sugar but hotter than spice
girl, u were fun, fantastic and fine
i would of done anything to make you mine
somehow that night i had lots a luck
i was in it for love not an occasional fuck
i could never let u get away
but when we met, i froze i had nothin to say
but u had the courage to stick wit me
i had no idea what we had the potential to be
then i realised that you were heaven sent from above
gurl u turn my world damn im in love

Sorry dude this was her last night

ermm...close this...butters wher eyou at...your on somewhere, delete the shit or something...no wodner your poor,spend all your time lookin at porn....why dont you leave a constructive critisicm,instead of freeposting,or maybe even just bad criticism,anythigns better then you posting pictures of some girl lookin mad stupid like that...someone ban this guy...


to the verse...im sorry your thread has been dirtied by this smut shit,but yeah,cant help it....some cats are stupid....the verse was eal simple,but you can elevate alot on it,over itm eyoull get better and shit,the rhymign was simple,the vocab needs a big uop,but keep writing and shi tan youll elevate dun...keep at it....

bismillah

Isshh!! was whack! Can't hate though you need to
Juice up your style with a little Hip Hop.. Stop listening to those
commercial rappers.. there garbage canning your style!!

Maybe yur boy '50' is feelin that, but im not. like my boy said ^^ keep yur style yur own, oh well~