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Different Song
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Verses speak volumes to ears that haven't been taught to listen/ Not blind by any means, but still lacking a true vision/ If only these words had the power to simply change/ I'd write nouns and spit verbs till they couldn't fit on the page/ But let's be realistic for a second, maybe a minute/ Nobody's showing love, they just don't have their heart in it/ Instead they'd rather hate, cause it's easier to spit a slur/ You're whack, you're fat, plus your style isn't prefered/ Did it ever occur? That we're intended to be unique/ Regardles of race and skin tone we're entitled to stand on our feet/ 40 hours a week, doesn't always translate success/ Some people are volunteers, it make them any less?/ So hard to digest, the way the world legitimizes this shit/ Supposed to stick together instead we're unloading bullet clips/ It's mad hard to dealth with, when we can't seem to get along/ If more people wrote verses, the world might be hearing a different song!........ Syke |
yea that was good.........the ummm mutlies were good
"intended to be unique" that sorta shit was nice............ make it a bit longer next time.......the vocab was good but at some places u could tweak it a lil bit..............nice one u just need ta write like long songs with choruses n shit |
This was Nice.........I was feelin it...........Kinda Lacked Vocab...........But it was still Nice
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uppin for feedback............Bash, TRill goodl ooks with the replies.............tryin to get this battle with Pax-Knight ova with over on front lines.............peep it and vote..........keep ya heads up..........peace
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