Jus Thortz
 

peep it


doin pushups in the sand, i look at myself as a man/
with the physical manifestation of the grim reaper in my right hand/
call it toast, u can call it a gat or a mak/
u'll meet it if ur trap spit sumn to make me react/
i'm a gangsta nigga, so u can catch me totin an uzi/
call me a 'blak nigger' i be quik to retreat the chamber smoothly/
let the gunpowder set then let up 50 missiles out my pistol/
rupturin ur cerrebellum so the smallest of your worries is scar tissue/
in my hood we all carry arms, find sum heat real warm in my palm/
fuk around and lil meesha and ray-ray's daddy gone be gone/
truss me the ak-47 be quik to relieve you/
and i'mma retrace ur steps so i can eliminate each one of ur ppl/

lemme change it up

its crystal clear us familia cats dnt feel fear/
u runnin ur mouf dawg? u cud easily push a wheelchair/
my rhymes wreck lives like the pure white i supply/
niggas chillin in bathrooms, snortin like vacuums/
out here it rains hollows, but if u rock a vest u prepared/
an if ur underwear wet comin offa the set, then u scared/
u cud go ahead an bite my lines but that aint gone help/
cos i write sick so u betta fuckin insure yourself/
make money is what i was told me and the benji's familiar/
i rep la familia, misstep i'm killin ya/


its nothin

this is what u wud call a real keystyle off top homeboy y'all stay up and rate 4 reel

i'm finna stop this shit cos i jus noticed this verse is reel week/........tru tru tru


if u wanan freepost then go to fuckin cypher......mmm need a 100 posts eh sounds like this might be some one's second RB account...........

you really should post a whole verse that isn't a mix of played out topic and wackness....just my thoughts...

This was fuckin whack........................Dont be posting short ass shit like dat here........

i straightened it up i was buggin b4

rate it now all u niggas wid n e intelligence

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fuckin whack.....Lets battle so i can just whoop yo ass....

see, this is soemthin where u are only focusing on the end of the phrases so u can rhyme wit da next line....Thats dumb becuz then half of ur shit doesnt even make sense. Pick a topic, stick to it, pick a flow, stick to it, (unless u change it up wit lettin people know) Then your rhymes will come along much more easier, stop focusin on the end, focus on the whole thing at once. I'm out...Payce

see i'm feelin that u gave me criticism in a reel way but i dnt c wat u mean. my rhymes flow and i aint never finna use a dictionary 2 do dat. my bars and lines r just like errbodyv elses so i dont c where ur comin from. respect tho