Dirtboy69 (1-0) vs. mystik11 (1-0)
 

Check in's by Sunday
Verses by Tuesday
Voting ends Thursday

Topic...
TRAPPED!

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checkin in


(i thought we didn't have to post a min for characters anymore this is getting really annoying for just checkin in )

here's my verse:

a grey day sets the emotion I'm feeling trapped/
a school day stupid rules again I'm feeling trapped/
a bully always takes my money am I hiding or trapped?/
another class failed. thinking does school have me trapped/
I think too much to live so now my brain's got me trapped/
I feel trapped in a dead end relationship always fighting/
me and my girl trapped cause we're always yelling/
then pretending to love again so more being trapped/
trapped in a dead end job, small apartment and little money/
always cloudy, overcast even rainy but never sunny/
trapped in detention with my bully sitting a row ahead/
I yell to gain his attention saying, " ha now your dead!"/
pull the gun from my pocket having a psychotic snap/
he fell for it stuck here... all of them stuck in my trap/
drop the teacher first far from even quenching my thrust/
cops about to burst in but I ain't the only leaving in a herse/
ended my life plus two more but I broke the emotional curse/

im droppin later on tonight........................................... .................
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the deadline was last night was it not???? so i think i win don't i? i guess he actually has until the threads close though to show

my computer crashed while i was typing and i sent a pm to the mod. im just waiting on what he says. I dont even have windows anymore prolly because kazaa gave me a virus. Im at school right now in typing class.

Yo extension granted aight.
Spit that shit.

spitting?


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im doin it now.............................................
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Im runnin fast, holdin on, but im losin control/
Runnin in circles, the devil is tryna take ova my soul/
My mind is in a state of paranoia, im goin crazy/
Cant trust nobody nowhere, these hoes they try to fade me/
but i still move quicker and swifter than the next nigga/
on the trigga, i stay bigga, thought i would lose how u figga/
they right behind me, so now im runnin outta time/
shit like the matrix, i gotta get to the next phone line/
its like a prison with bars surroundin' my every fuckin' move/
everybody is starin and watchin, and soon imll go boom/
im just waitin to detonate, but every move they anticipate/
and catch me in my final stance, like a romance thats just waitin to end/
holdin on because of a love thats able to extend/
back to reality, no time up ahead is a bridge, ya no im jumpin'/
aint no way im lookin back, cuz to them this shit is nothin'/
as im up in the air all i fill brush against me is the wind or a breeze/
for a minute i was trapped, i wake up its all a dream/

uppin for some votes then. good verse i guess why'd it take so long???? problems with the board or your computer(i'm just filling space)

I truly didn't think either was outstanding,
But mystik11 get's my vote aight.
CLOSED!