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Hey, I'm new to this site, just wanted to post up simething I wrote some time ago, I'm not really good at poetry but tell me what you think.


nobody hears me
nodody sees me
invisable to this world
no one understands me
my whole life is wasted
my mind is twisted
blind from realitly
who am I even suppose to be
I can't survive this complicated life
my world is caving in on me
closing in on me
pushing me to the edge
I'm crying inside
dying inside
I wasn't even suppose to live

nice drop. was honest and i was feelin what u were gettin accross. keep writin

Hey...It was good...It seemed to flow alright...I agree With Nicanda..I was feelin it. Keep it up

It wasn't bad. This piece came off to me as you writing exactly what was going on in your head. I liked that. Kind of short but you still did good with putting a lot of info in a few words.

blind from realitly
who am I even suppose to be
I can't survive this complicated life
my world is caving in on me
closing in on me

I feel like that sometimes. Especially the last 2 lines. Nice job.

Thanks for the feedback everyone I really appreciate it.
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