my life
 

Living in a place where you could always settle scores, but had to suffer through ghetto wars//
This isn't the life that was ment for me, or is it? I can't think long enough to see//
Always watchin' my back incase someones out to kill me, never know if my next rhyme will be the last I ever drop//
While my friends were opposite race, I felt so so outta place//
Livin' all around me sportin' corn rows, but they always helped me with my flows//
Racist family raised me but I overcame, couldn't let their beleifs put my hopes to shame//
I wouldn't give in to it before I'd change my name, And not many people would think the same//
I hold the world record for gettin' jumped, white kid must look like money//
Though I never had any, True friends? didn't have many//
Couldn't trust anyone, cuz if I did I would be gone//
This is my life though, I'll probably never roll in tha dough//
But I wouldn't ever trade it for no one's, Cuz they couldn't take the guns!!!!

Thats just part of my song I'm writin'.
Love to get some input, ya'll are great, I've gotten much better than before I came here.... this is a great place

that was o.k, pretty wack though, elevate on flow, and wordplay..!

kepp spittin though!

thnx for the imput man, appreciate it

This was aight..........Pretty simple but it was an aight drop,.............Return da favour and checkout my boy Infinite22's Drop , Its called B.R.E Presentz: For tha soldierz

Will do dawg... thnx for the imput

Ya gave me imput on mine and so I will do the same to you. I liked parts of it like some where pretty well done will others just didnt really stick out to me and all.

thanks for the imput R.x.

yeah waht was said before,the vocab is pretty simple,but im feeling th eflwo of it,i didn tmind it,but still needs a bit up nahmean,nothin drastic,just some voacb ups and such...but it wsnt to bad,keep uppin dun...would liek ot hear the audio...

Thanks for input............ I'll holla' back at ya when I get it on audio........ I'mma re-write it wit sum better vocab + another verse or 2

this was aight..
sharpen ya swords dunz..

wordplay,flow and structure...work on that

thnx Saladin