Happy
 

Happy

Feels like its been a while since I ran through my mind
So much shh goes on happiness aint easy 2 find.
Theres so much shh that goes on every day hard 2 find some happiness useless 2 pray.
Man up stairs stopped listen 2 me while back/
Plus faith in him is something ive long lacked.
I’m unloyal 2 all cept my baby of course.
I could talk 2 her till I go hoarse.
She the only happiness in my life, she make time wit her a ball
Sittin by da phone right after we part waiting 4 her call.
She da only thing in my life that can make me smile.
Evertime I see her get so excited could go run a mile.

Im saying..
Damn gurl its hard explainin whatcha do 4 me
You the only thing in my life dat brings me glee.
You set me free get me excited jumpin round like im Jet Lee I don’t know if you see whatcha mean 2 me.
You the only think makes me smile gurl you my baby, always will be

Need ya words of incouragement like you need mine.
Need 2 do my work but can't cause im thinking of you all da time.
It’s funny cathcin myself smiling cause im thinking bout you
Never felt like dis 4, ensures me it’s tru. Wanna be doin dis till my life is through
I take you ne day over my bros and crew,
screwed a friend over 2 get with you
and id do it again cause I need you,
Always there 4 me, you mean more than a crew
Always going tell you how much I love you
so you know its tru.

Cause Gurl its hard 2 explain watcha do 4 me.
You the only think in my life dat brings me glee. Telling you that you set me free,
u get me excited jumpin round like im 5 & gotta pee, I aint quite sure you seein watcha doin 4 me.
You the only thing makes me smile gurl you my baby
promise me you always will be.

Gurl hoping someday it'll be you I come home 2 @ night.
If it aint you babe then ill look @ my life and know sometin aint right.
Cause I need everything about you from you head right down 2 your toes
You the thing bringing me up from those really low low’s..,
I didn’t do this on my own baby, it was eachother we chose. We like bros takin on lifes problems like foes. Right

Cause baby girl its hard 2 explain watcha do 4 me
You da only thing in my life dat bringin me glee. Lettin you know that you set me free
Get me all excited got me jumpin round cause I know you love me.
I don’t know if ya know what you do 2 me
Baby gurl don’t go ne where & I’ll forever be happy
with you by my side I always will be.

2 my baby

While heartfelt, I'm sure, this was very long, and honestly I didn't finish. It has a good message, but maybe you could do better on this subject by making it terse, yet powerful. Jus my nickel on it tho, keep up........

I thought it was really nice. Kinda simple, and some parts didn't flow to well...but all in all it was fairly well....great post..keep it up...

peAce

The flow was a little rough but I liked what you said in it a lot. Sometimes it looked like you just threw words in to make it rhyme..kind of forced, if that makes any sense. That didn't really matter, I liked this.

"Need ya words of incouragement like you need mine.
Need 2 do my work but can't cause im thinking of you all da time.
It’s funny cathcin myself smiling cause im thinking bout you
Never felt like dis 4, ensures me it’s tru. Wanna be doin dis till my life is through"

I liked that part. I'm feeling that towards a girl I know right now so I felt those lines.

"Gurl hoping someday it'll be you I come home 2 @ night.
If it aint you babe then ill look @ my life and know sometin aint right.
Cause I need everything about you from you head right down 2 your toes
You the thing bringing me up from those really low low’s..,
I didn’t do this on my own baby, it was eachother we chose. We like bros takin on lifes problems like foes. Right"

I was also feelin those lines. You're a good writer. And good luck with this girl you're talking about ;)