TOPICAL BATTLE KnightShade VS Vortex ( Peep it, should be good )
 

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Topic: Secret's Untold

No crew votes, No Votes from War Lords, VD, or Chrit.

no due dates

lets see some deep emotional shit, take it to another level. lets see how creative our minds can be.

The Story Of Logan Matthews...


He keeps his thoughts to himself,
scared to express his true feelings
Since his heart was shattered and the parts were scattered,
he tried to conceal it
He'd never told Sarah before,
but Logan loved her dearly
And secretly he'd kept a pair of her gold leafed ear rings.
Each day when she'd go out,
Logan would sit at his window
Watching her every move as she walked down the mid-road
Everytime he looked in her eyes,
he feel lost and with no direction.
Mesmerised by the tone of her skin,
her body's perplextion.
Her whole physique held him captive,
he felt stuck in the moment.
Awaiting the second she whispered
"Im ready now Logan".
But Logan and Sarah had broken up,
about six months back
And that was around the time
Logans life went off track
It became less of a fantasy,
and a lot more risky
He became a Stalker
drank whisky and acted shifty.
Since they'd seperated,
Logan didnt quite recover
And couldnt see why they shouldnt be together -
he loved her
And logan figured that if he couldnt have her,
no one deserved her
So that night he wrapped up a knife under his sweat shirt,
Broke into Sarah's home,
and waited for her to arrive
As soon as the door opened,
he grabbed her by the throat - showed her the knife
This scared sarah speechless,
he told her "Its something i must do"
" Because my life isnt worth living if i cant have you..."




Figure It Out...

Secrets Untold...
 

.:Whispering Secrets:.

I sit back and recline-in-the-breeze..celebrate the time-of-peace,
wine-and-weed,Inhale the Smoke Keeps my mind-at-ease,
Nerves are calm,whisky puts me out-In-sleep,
and take these "words to the grave" about this secret im about-to-speak...

.:Story Time:.

i was raised-in-the-hood for a purpose, my soul-was-neglected,
as i sit there shivering in the chilling winds my body feels
cold-and-errected,
I give mad respect for my family for makin-me-do-right,
like if i was stealing souls from innocents the way im takin-a-new-life,
i was broke and alone, sometime my weight-may-ponder,
and if i never made it out i would have gave the greats-dishonor,
words express emotions wheather its hate-or-its-love,
and to have a good life is something i practiced and elevated-above,
I felt like silent shots are close,tips toward to peirce-my-skin,
crying from tears-of-sin..i went threw stages of life where I
fear-a-friend,
things looked bright,but all of a sudden the weather got
colder-and-blue,
thoughts like a soldier-recruit..and i was tired of hearing
"respect everyone older-than-you",
Ive asked for the Lord to reach out and show-ways,
the deal is both-ways...went threw quick and slow-days,
felt lonely without my steel, but the path shall turn nines-to-dust,
ive always had my peice along by my side when ever times-got-tough,
i lost all courtisey for the law when they had rights to
maim-a-citizen,
i was no where near the crime scene, judgemental people
framed-the-innocent,
i stopped the gangsta act, so what i used to throw-plenty-powder,
and if you dont "save yourself" evil in you will grow-every-hour,
there lost and out of luck,like science professors i
confuse-the-students,
and ive learned to surpass all the opticals going threw the
roots-of-music....


oh and Enjoy you sad excuse for a text'cee.

huuuuuuuuuum...




I'd have to say Knight... better overall verse... more complex... slightly deeper... like I said... better overall...





OH BOY..!


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im gonna have to give my vote to vortex that shit almost made me cry j/k but nah that shit was deep knight shade ya joint was deep as well but i seen some shit happen like vortex was talkin bout before so he gets my vote -1-

nevermind mine doesnt count cause it wont let me vote i hate this new system but oh well good drops by both -1-

but i seen some shit happen like vortex was talkin bout before so he gets my vote -1-

<~ D/R

and im playin it strict both ways so dont cry about votes

1-1 i guess, nice drop man . .

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no it is 0-0 both ways poll votes is what counts kid.

and thats what is gonna win this battle, like it or not.

Ahhhhhhhhh, i didnt know that -
sounds ok to me though, upping for poll voters!

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uppin for poll voters please, lets see some poll voters fuck this 100 characters is fucking gay lol..........................

uppin for poll voters please, lets see some poll voters fuck this 100 characters is fucking gay lol..........................

Knightshade had the better overall verse....

Vortex story was good but a little simplistic...

Knight had a nice story plus a good flow and use of multies...

good job by both....

one...

can you use the polls if you can............................
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Emhhhhhhhhhh HAve to go with Knight on this......yo he had the best overall verse...na'mean...like meta said Vortex wus simplistic....but nicely done both

Vote : Knight

ps: need more explanation just holla at Ruth

return the favor yo

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