-==mommy==-
 

Mommy, when I went to school today,
The kids all laughed and stared.
They made fun of my clothes mommy,
And the way I wore my hair.

I asked them if they would stop mommy,
I begged and pleaded and cried.
But it only made them laugh harder mommy,
It was tearing me up inside.

I tried to answer a question in math mommy,
But I got it wrong.
They said I was stupid mommy,
They said that I was dumb.

Why is this happening to me mommy?
Did I do something bad?
Why do they treat me like this mommy?
Why am I always so sad?

Why can't they understand mommy,
That I have feelings too?
Why do they abuse me mommy?
Do they think it's cool?

I can't take it any more mommy,
It's gone on way too long.
They treat me like I'm different mommy,
They say I don't belong.

The pills are in my pocket mommy,
I wonder if this will work.
I hope I die quickly mommy,
I hope it doesn't hurt.

Please don't feel guilty mommy,
Tell daddy it's not is fault.
Tell my big sister mommy,
That she has helped me out a lot.

I'm sorry I must go now mommy,
I've takin all the pills.
I'm starting to feel dizzy mommy,
I'm starting to feel ill.

Please pray for me mommy,
Pray that angels take me away.
Please ask God a favor mommy,
That with him I will always stay.

I'll miss you a lot mommy,
I'll miss daddy and my sister too.
I want all of you to know mommy,
That I'm sorry and I love you.


I wrote this for my friend who felt this inside and she wouldnt tell anyone not even me.....

I'm kind of speechless after reading this. I liked it a lot but don't know what to say about it. It was very good and you wrote it well. Really depressing too. I dunno what else there is to say about it...

thats my gurl, puttin it down for poetry
still waitin for u to drop an open mic ;)

nice

Woah, pretty amazing. I mean, conventional structure aspect aside, there was a lot of emotions in this. And y'know I know how it goes. I know how it goes feeling sad, getting made fun of, and wanting to die and all. It aint pretty. Sometimes I forget but poems like this keep reminding me.

Just one thing... if you wrote this for someone else, I would hope you would want to give them a positive outlook on the situation. Yet you end the poem in death, and that is only going to depress the person you wrote it for even more.

Then again, I doubt you wanna write about puppys, rainbows, and balloons. So... yeah...

~Shalom~

hahahaha;) thanks tory! well bout the open mic thing???

errr....maybe???:rolleyes:

well..i wrote this cuz for some reason i feel what she's feelin but she aint wanna open up so i aint really sure how to end it ya know...but i havent shown her this yet and i aint plannin on giving it to her cuz i know it would definitely make things worse....when i wrote this i cried....i know i know im pathetic but i actually did and at that moment i realized how many times i pity myself for somethin so little but never realize how lucky i am..*sigh* wish she would just talk to me...but i dont wanna get into it ya know...its personal and i wont butt in to anything...

...im really glad u enjoyed this...uppin!

hey fucker...

she never said she died

she took some pills and felt dizzy and ill

i do it all the time

fuckin whole scripts of somas... still, i dont die

i just dont die

some reason...

i just dont die

and o god some times the desire to die is so ....... there

as is now

ive taken the pills shizzy

im feeling dizzy

ima take a nap

I like this poem, It was real, tight shit

i liked this girl stay up this was awesome

yeah she has soul it was aight and it could have been better but if you got shit to say don't hold back spit da truthcause its all better than lies

i know this is a bit late but i just wanna say thanks...

but im uppin this to get some feedbacks if it would be good for an audio...

Tell me what u think and it would be very much appreciated.

Thanks.

This has got be one of the most amazing things i have ever read!!!

Seriously this should be put to audio.

I'm not really one for poetry and things like this but this touched me in a way that i never thought possible.

I aint afraid to say this an i hope none of my boys read what i'm about to write coz i'll get the piss ripped outta me but this almost had me in tears, i was so close!

A couple of weeks ago a boy that was in the first year of the school i went to recently commited suicide due to bullying, and it makes me wonder if he was to read this it might have changed his mind on his outcome of life.

all i can say really is one love to you for writtin this ...

PUT IT TO AUDIO !!!

I wrote down some feelings in a poem earlier ... can you have a look an tell me what you think ...

what a BITCH can do!

Thanx... 1Love!

Stop Whining...Sike

Forreal This Was Moving
And Just Shows that We
Cant Close Ourselves Off
From Everyone And Everyone
Isnt Always Okay And Has Thier
Skeletons Slasha Hangups
As Labor Days Flicker Forming
The Mixture For A Life Well
Deserving Of Something Better

Did Your Friend Pass Away?
Hopefully Not Cause It Sucks Girl

Peace

That poem was absolutely insane. Very well written and shit i dont even know wat else to say. I can relate a lot tho so ya that was tight VERY NICE.

Thanks guys....

sooooo...YES for audio??

Ive been trying to put them together so that they would fit the beat...*sigh*...

but yeah..very much appreciated.....