my suicidal mind frame
 

we all of a dieing breed, our life is surpassing, the cycle is everlasting so we all bleed, its my destiny to lead, if God willing ill blessfully suceed, my intuition leads to suspicion, broken dreams turned into wishing,a whole race that doesnt listen, a cold place that i wont be missin, my only options are death and incarceration, left alone facing the anticipation of leaving this earth my heart is racing, hope i get a new start reincarnation but ill probaly be stuck in eternal damnation, this is my worldly fate,
wont make it to the pearly gate, wish i could clean my slate but its too late,im already seeing the ongoing flame, my thoughts are fleeing my unknowing brain, going insane only have myself to blame, my suicidal mind frame

Yo this is just a little piece of my mind so holla at me and let me know what ya think

I thought this was pretty deep, very emotional and sounded like it came from the heart, that makes it dope in its own way, the rhyme scheme was pretty basic, not too major on the wordplay front, but that didnt affect it - it was heart felt - nice drop man...

Leave some feedback on mine. .

nic edrop...even though it was small,and left me wanting to read more heart felt goodness from your self...but it doesnt matter,ill wait till next time.
excellent spit...wordplay an vocab werent to amazing,but like vortex mentioned,when its from the heart and you can feel its from the heart.its definetly better then any word can describe...nice job...

peep my step left...verse.

bismillah