"My Shoes"
 

Tell me what you think...It's an older poem But I was bored So I will post it..lol....

You think you got it bad?
Try living without a mom or dad
Think your life is the worse?
Try living like no matter what you do, You get cursed
Getting beat everytime you turn around
No matter what you do, you get pushed down
Your just trying to get by
Though sometimes you wonder Why
Always going to bed Late at night
Never knowing if you will wake up Alright
You feel as if no one really cares
Wishing you could be anywhere but there
Just wanting to run the hell away
Never going back, No Way.
Never getting told that your really Loved
Only One you know who cares, Is above
Parents and family always telling you to shut your mouth
That you don't know what the hell your talking about
Wearing Baggy Clothes to cover the bruises
Don't know why you care to live, It only confuses
When you feel that you can't Take anymore
You just hit your knees and fall to the floor
You wouldn't know what the fuck to do
If you had to walk in My Shoes

damn baby girl that shit was ill, a little short but straight to the point,easy to follow good word usage,over all nice piece,keep postin your shit girl if no one else would hear it i would i do reall y like your pieces.peace out boo

Parts of this I liked, parts of it I didn't. Don't get me wrong, you're damn good writer but I don't like poems that come off like a competition for who has the worst life. Someone always has it worse than you.

You think you got it bad?
Try living without a mom or dad
Think your life is the worse?

You wouldn't know what the fuck to do
If you had to walk in My Shoes

Besides those lines right there, I liked what you wrote.

"Never getting told that your really Loved
Only One you know who cares, Is above"

I dunno if your life is really like this, but if it is, those lines right there should keep you going. Those were the lines I liked most out of it. You might have it bad but it's always good to keep a positive view towards everything. I'm glad you feel that way.

It looked like you put a lot of emotion into this with describing how you're treated. I felt that. You always do good with writing that way, helping the reading feel what you feel. So instead of dragging out this reply a lot more I'll just say this was good and I'm glad I read it.

I totally understand, Legendary. I agree also. I thought I had a hard life untill I stumbled upon this boy at my old school. He had it alot worse. Thats when I started looking more positive. But that was after I wrote this. Thank you for the feedback.

Thank you, DiverseSyndicate, I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it.

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