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Twiztid_chick69 05-27-03 09:25 PM

"Just Friends"
 
Tell me what you think...It's kinda a normal topic...but o well...

When I first met you, I knew
That I was only ment For you
I seen it in your eyes when you talked to me
That me and you were just ment to be
Every time we touch, I get goosebumps
My breath catches in my Throat, Like a Clump
I love those weekends, When we just sit at home
And spend all day talking on the phone
You Give me a warm feeling deep inside
I just want us to run away and hide
Just you and me together
For worse, Or for better
You have stolen every piece of my heart
I don't ever want us to be apart
You are everything to me
All that I could ever want you to be
You are everything I ever wanted in a man
Anything that you want to do, You can
It's just the way I deeply feel
Like sometimes its a dream, Not real
How your words hit me when you speak
They make me feel weak
When I'm with you I feel Like I could die
And I would be just fine
You are my whole perfect world
You make me Proud to be a girl
I want us to be together untill the end
But you say that were Just Friends...

twisted_illusion 05-28-03 06:28 AM

That was real tight, was totally feelin it, I'm in the same situation except he has a girlfriend......:(

Twiztid_chick69 05-29-03 10:46 AM

Aww...I hate to hear that. I actually wrote this when I was in the situation. We finally got together. We stayed that way for a week and couldn't get along. It was all a big mistake..lol. :)

peAce

The Necromancer 05-30-03 02:21 AM

Well...? What am I supposed to say? I know how you feel about me and all, but these internet relationships never work out. Trust me, I have imaginary internet relationships with every girl online. (But maybe they don't work out because they're on the internet so much as they are imaginary... huh...)

But seriously, this was a great peice. I mean, the flow was admitivly a bit choppy. But it was still enjoyable to read. The feelings when it starts actually makes the reader feel good. But it sort of twists out of that at the end you that "Let's just be friends" line is spouted. And that never really feels good.

~Shalom~

Twiztid_chick69 05-30-03 12:02 PM

lol...Thanks for the reply. I know I have great feelings for you. I just can't help myself. Your too damn sweet. lol. Thankz!!

peAce

Noiz 05-31-03 08:08 AM

It Was Really Tight...Sometimes The Most Simplified Verses Have The Biggest Impact

Good Job

Twiztid_chick69 06-06-03 01:39 PM

Thank you. I greatly appreciate your feedback! :)

peAce


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