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Everytime I hear your name
I'm not sure if I'm filled with
love or hate

were you just using her?
Just to secure your future
so you won't end up fuck'd
bitch why don't you be a man
and stop living off her
you just sit on your fat ass
and do shit all day
useless and pathetic
perfect words that desribe you

you never made sense
I wonder do you even know
what your doing?
always full of crap
when you open your mouth
all I hear is complete bull shit

I will never know if you
ever loved her
or not
but the answer lies with you now
buried deep in the earth
under all the soil and dirt
were you belong

(you selfish bitch
I hope you fuckin
burn in hell
for this shit)

when you went
you took all
your dirty lies
away with you
the answers to my questions
will always remain
a question.....


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This is intense, I can feel what you're saying.

Thanks for the reply Dreemur336 =)

its ight..intense, but wat the hell rhymes in this "poetic scripture"...u need better vocab, sure it makes sence but sounds more like a "let loose" kinda thing...

its aiight

Its Alright...Just Make It A Litle Bit More In Depth And It Will Be Straight

Peace.

I thought this was a good venting piece. A lot of anger in it. I don't care that it didn't rhyme like another response said it should have. It was a good post.

Noiz, you fucking idiot. Quit working on your post count. You said that same bullshit response in like 4 other writings on here. I read a few of them, besides the 5 that are completely the same, the rest of your bullshit is one line responses. Way to go on your 92 post average in like 2 days..so right now you got 101 posts of bullshit on RB.

Twisted, sorry about putting this in your thread.

"you never made sense
I wonder do you even know
what your doing?
always full of crap
when you open your mouth
all I hear is complete bull shit"

I just read it again and thats a good part out of it. You can apply it to Noiz's genius responses. He probably didn't even read any of what he responded to.

Thanks for the replies.
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The poem was about my uncle who passed away, and he was using my aunt for her money. At first it was my aunt who was sick and had cancer and we wern't sure if she was going to survive but she did and then not long after my uncle died.
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Just a lil background about the poem.