first timer but heavy rhymer
 

I was that drug dealers dream, a crack feen/
drainin da fluid from my spleen wit pills from white to green/
things don't always look as good as they seem/
matter of fact they aint good at all/
drugs is one of the reasons for my downfall/
tryin to make things better/
i'll do wuteva it takes to get a break in life/
I'm tired of doin wrong before right/
I'm trying to to fight an addiction/
before i go into extinction, like the dinosaurs/
i only got one choice but to voice my opinion/
and to show you life is'nt always good just cuz u didnt grow up in the hood!

this was decent for ya first time, just work on, everything...
return the favor and peep mines called Not the Average

not bad man, you need to drop some more into your shit, but keep elevating it'll be good

Yo that was decent for da first but structure your bars.