B.R.E presents:Lyrical slice and dice
 

what??
look there needs to be ,alot of emcees,takin the mic in they hand,crushin newbies/
Adressin the nation 3 times in a row,started an idea, i thought of 10 seconds ago,now im in control/
The hotseat can't even make me flinch, pussies get hard, their dick grow one inch.../
Slammin up the fire,im in the backseat,got the heat,im in control now, so hand me them keys/
Playa please, gotcha Gassed up lyrically,never spit fire, till i was a teen,no difference,if they say you whack i agree/
Hit ya key, drop an open mic, do what you can, fucked up since day 1- puerto rican and dominican/
not my damn fault, i was an unwanted baby,got feared and shit, like i was born with rabies/



spittin bars that come out in mass productions/
hershey trucks can't show off,with my seductions/
Spittin hot shit that put volcanoes to shame/
you must be "retarted" cuz ya rhymes is all "lame"/
And ever since I rapped i always carried inside a flame/
because only real niggas, are built for this game/
been two years in training, now the beast is unleashed/
you could never beat the best, from when they whack to they peak/
Now have the basic spit, spit the basic shit, and your a basic mc/
but to spit about real shit, in a real way, is to be the best you can be/
and now when you read this, and you whack and know ya fate/
because im'a tie loose ends up, like i was the motherfuckin interstate/

uppin this shittt

pussies get hard, their dick grow one inch///that was clever

yo the vocab could've been better
that multies were extremely good in the first verse
u could've done better
well this really didnt have much to do with the topic.........

over all nice peice 6-10

lol aight thanx still uppin this

uppin^^

Not a bad drop man, and i know its a bitch being slept on, so i'll up this for you. .


I didnt think thius verse was THAT bad, you have the basics down, multi's / a bit of wordplay, flowed pretty smooth throughout, kept the bars short and tight, you could probably bebefit from adding some internal rhyming or adding more emotion and imagery into your pieces rather than a cryptioc written, that would take you ontop the next level, elevation is the key - not a bad drop though, you'll get better with practice.

Peace!

yo not bad it was good got of th topic no wait what was the topic lol im playn man hey nie i give it a 7 ot ad hey yall hit up e n whiterap19's song ....Song Cry aight ill return the favor aight

uppin for more feedback, i'll return the favor