Vortex (1-0) vs. Addlib (1-0)
 

Check in's by Monday
Verses by Tuesday
Voting Ends Thursday

Topic...
Nothing to lose

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Nice Topic. .

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The Story Of Jason Rogers. .



Life on the street is hard,
he'd love getting a Penny for his Thoughts
but his only Window of Oppourtunity
is the hole in his cardboard box.
See, Jasons homeless. .
his eyes red and his clothes are torn
and Home Sweet Home
is the cold floor of a shop porch.
Once more he sits to ponder,
how his life got so screwed
in a constant state of: Heads - You Win,
Tails - I Lose.
Failure doomed his future,
forced him to retreat to the streets
He lost his mom to cancer
and his job in the same week.
now his brains weak from the drugs he's taking,
but this should be excused,
for He Has Nothing,
therefore he Has Nothing to lose. .

Its Tuesday, 5.20pm where i live. .


Therefore you no show.

Can i at least get some feedback on my verse?

yo vortex know's the score and i'm sorry i missed the deadline
But let's give him sum feedback on the vers



I thought tha beggining of the verse was a great opener

And the verse was tight, it was true, had wordplay, was creative
and had a good story, the structure was solid and tidy

great stuff, i always enjoy your topical pieces

-peace-