Standing
 

I hide behind the yellow line
that seperates us two
Hidden in a picture frame
like when I loved you
My thoughts are crossed
beneath the fog
Faceless I stand still
Left to breath eternity
is this how is should feel
Standing here with nothing left to show
It's second place I always take
Nowhere left to go
Through your mind I can see the rain
feel all the pain
Everymoment without you
is driving me insane
I'll take you in beneath my wings
filling all the scars
I'll look up high and through your eyes
wish away the stars
I thrive to find a place in time
when you look the same
I cry out loud to find myself
lost in the big game

its aiight

Its Pretty Good, Make It A Little More In Depth

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Thanks for your feedback

its tight but u should make a lil more deep and a bit longer,other than that keep doin ya thing,peace.

well the concept is kinda common but the fact that how u write it made the reader understand that life do suck!...hehe

keep it up