critique me , help
 

You must be jokin with me tryna step to the ace card/
you sound like you just drank a glass of Nestles Bitch Quick/
or mabey carnation bitch start/

Why even try knowin I hunt fake rappaz/
talkin shit like I aint got the bars to slap ya/
I crush anyone who oppose me/
did you think you could even come close to master ghostie/
your just another passin phase/
like your momas syphilis case/
soundin like a like fuckin parot bird/
look I just fucked up another carbon copier/
and when ya father wont touch your worn out clit/
you can come to auncle ghostie as the continual bitch/

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vs pledgeofpanther

Flow- Weren't Consistant...Try To Make Each Line A Similar Amount Of Sylables...It Will Sound And Flow Better......

Punches- Not Hard Enough...Be More Creative And Personal...Look At Their Profile If You Have To...And Make Sure They Direct And Make Sense......

Wordplay- Didn't See Any...Its Not The Easiest Of Things To Get Grasp Of But Read Quo's Guide On It...It Will Help Alot...Read Rises Guide And Vendetta's Guide, They Will Help You Elevate Alot...

I Aint Got Enough Time To Go Through Everything But Read The Battling Guides......

Good Luck......

Move this to Open Mic.

[ Closed ]


*Well it would be if i could do it, lol.*