Shallow but runs deep
 

Verse1:
He’s selfish, but like a shellfish,
Surface hard like steel, beneath’s soft like tissue for real,
Maybe greedy like Scrooge,
n its constantly been proved,
Makes un accounted high
amounted donations but
never makes future quotations,
Takes all positions over throwing oppositions
n takes location of the whole station,
Does countless acts of generosity without curiosity
Or robbery but still faces eternal damnation,
Heart surrounded by unfounded frost
And drives the clueless to being lost,
Pumping blood filled with fire and often drives
The misguided from being divided

Chorus:
[He’s a selfish man] for survival he’ll pick on the fatigued,
[He’s a selfish man] but he often protects the weak,
[He’s a selfish man] he’ll betray a leader to be a chief,
[He’s a selfish man] but he’ll help the inexperienced climb the steep,
On the surface he’s shallow but on the inside the water runs deep.

Verse 2:
Heard by the outside, but hasn’t spoken out-wide,
Hasn’t really joined sides,
So he tag’s along in joy rides,
Protected like a knight’s armour,
But pain penetrates due to karma,
By the related he’s a skeptic
So often he gets rejected,
By the assiosiated he’s got
personal perspective there fore he’s accepted,
He’s selfish and greedy, but helps the needy,
This is the two sides of one man and until you’ve encountered both u’ll never meet me.

Chorus:
[He’s a selfish man] for survival he’ll pick on the fatigued,
[He’s a selfish man] but he often protects the weak,
[He’s a selfish man] he’ll betray a leader to be a chief,
[He’s a selfish man] but he’ll help the inexperienced climb the steep,
On the surface he’s shallow but on the inside the water runs deep.

YO uppin this is the best peice of work i've dun ever..lol took 10 mins though
hahaha

oh well see what yall think maybe RB legend material \.......i think not yet

but 1 day i shall be there and my name will venture there

*trill sighs* no replies yet

nice... not rb legends i dont think...

8/10...

you can do better kid... and wheres ya goddamn audio at?

thanks inpire......and take that sand shit outta yo signature u told
me he was just straight clowing..................

yo any one else wanna REPLY..................................

ahem... hence the rolleyes face... a.k.a. the SARCASTIC face... lol wheres ya damn audio?

it was OK...Um tRill how can you act all hard and accuse Inspire of just quoting a funny quote WHEN YOU STICKIED YOUR VERY OWN PIECE!!!!! Oh my.........Anyway...The hook was perty good on this, make the last verse longer but or put in a 3rd....

it was pretty good trill............................................. .................................................. ......

aiit thinx for the replies.......UPPING

.Hot.
 

This joint was hot... wasn't your hottest shit ever though. Can't agree on that, sorry kid. Anyways, it had a nice flow to it, kept me readin' the whole way through. Hot spit dun, as usual. HOLLA.

Protected like a knight’s armour,
But pain penetrates due to karma,

i think this was the worst line in this piece...

Takes all positions over throwing oppositions
n takes location of the whole station,
Does countless acts of generosity without curiosity
Or robbery but still faces eternal damnation

this was the best lines i thought...

i'd rate this an 7.5/10 not an 8 only because the second verse showed u weren't too consistant wit this whole piece...the first verse i'd say is an easy 8- 8.5..............the chorus i think should been a little diffrent i thought this one was kinda corny

this was an alright drop def not the greatest though....




















artifacts has spoken

that fuckin chorus was raw nasty! ...fuckin sick with this shit duke.


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Not your best but still damn good. I liked the lines but am agreeing with artifacts. Some could have been better. I love the concept of the shit though, for a 10 minute work this is damn ill. good work! keep spittin!

yea this ws good rapping

I liked it but im more of a fan to your other works like, The remix ya did to Many Men that was hot this was just aight fo me dawg.

R.x Out