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*I've made a decision today...*
I’ve made a decision today, I’m leaving you…
At least until this emotion in me resides I’ll come back when I alone can survive And can live without feeling deprived I cannot go on like this, needing you… I am my own person; I am my own entity With out you my body won’t cease breathing I need to stop hoping that and start believing There is more to me out there, than seeing you… My heart won’t stop caring; just a physical separation Animosity I condone, you may have your indignation I just need to fill my head with realism, in contemplation My body needs to learn to stop breathing you… Scar tissue of my heart you still hold in all it’s being Every hope and dream I’ve ever had you’re exceeding But the final stages of recovery need completing So, I’ve made a decision today, I’m leaving you… At least until this emotion in me resides I’ll come back when I alone can survive And can live without feeling deprived Aight ch'all new feelins, this is what I did about them, an it was a quick write, tell me what cha think, peace |
Re: *I've made a decision today...*
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no one could ever put this in better words except you...i was actually feelin it...these words just gave me chills down my spine.. living in a dream of love is an awesome feeling but once that i give up shit gets on and we're facing reality..it would just hit u rght on the face... Quote:
this one got a nice metaphor...i dig it..im feelin that there's this hole that is needed to fill in, a question without a solution or eveb just thoughts, a hand missing a thumb, basically a body without a heart, incompleteness in general...props for this gurl...decisions are hard to do especially if u have fewer or even harder choices....sometimes u just gotta decide and do what u feel is better...nicely done...much respect |
god girl.its a great piece.i have to agree with shiznit on what she said bout those two verces.they are deep,simply amazing.
props to ya.one |
thank you all, the decision I have made is really hard... haha I'm a dork but I'll get through it. Thanks for the replies, an peace
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ill shit, i liked it
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ima just say this: nice. lol i liked it alot actually. i was feelin it. i know how hard it is to makea decision like that. much love keep droppin
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thank you... to mah RB support group geez y'all have helped me a lot with guys, I remember some hard ish that people here helped me through too bad that kid's gone he was cool (BloodiFingaz) but yea thanks for the feedback, peace
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damn ma u got tha imagery shyt down, not tha kind thats a scene but an emotion, i feel u, i aint even a gurl but i can feel ya pain...
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lol then I guess that means I'm doin mah job huh boi? lol thank you Pro, peace
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damn girl.....u really know how to make shit vivid!! i agree with everyone else..ill shit! fo' reals!!........peace
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Hey, this was like really amazing.
A consistent and proper structure with appropriate word choice and placement. With that, you crafted and created a conundrum of contorted enigmatic emotions of everything you seem to have ever endured. Sorry about the alliteration, they're almost as bad as puns. But, you got stuff to go through and I wish the best you can heal yourself. ~Shalom~ |
thank you for the big words... haha nah I feel ya thank you for the feedback on my ish and the support in mah icky situation. Peace
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wow..necromancer...u must be an ill emcee...usin big words and shit...ill homie....much luv fo ya...peace..
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that shit was a really good poem stay up nice work
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