The Real Potent/how cornyBLAH
 

rippin all those who creepin for some free,
spittin on you, leave you weepin, and i'm jus not an emcee,
Cuz i cee-em rappin on a mic, FUCK IT this is jus shit that i write,
But give me the mic and the flame will be burning bright white/
im jus a young teen, confused whether or not things shook,
ima confused bean, is this world like the one of peter pan and captain hookBLAH/
My personna split in two i'm polite but i will spit at you/
But now i no this isn't being fake,
Ho's jus forsake, there to buy a hocake/
I'm a gangsta with 'words', in real life that would jus be 'absurd',
there isn't one person that hasn't been 'served'/
...unlike the gaffa of oliver twist
a secrecy of what my fighting rhymes consist,
ah FUCK IT i'll tell you... it's not in the mind it's in the fist/
But apart from that my thoughts are out,im OUT,

jus a quik few bars cuz im bored, ima post a song whenever tho.
LATER!!

YOUR WORDPLAY IS SO WELL CONSTRUCTED I LIKED THIS LOOKING FORWARD TO SEE MORE

This was Nice
keep em comin

seemed key'd....

pretty ok though...i liked it

not bad.. not bad... u use alot of eminem comparisons tho, even in the response to my thread.. It worked in this l'il bit, but try to stay away from it, people hate on em' followers here for some reason, they'll call you an 8 mile wannabe.. lol, I like eminem (he's my fav rapper) but I been doin' this since way b4 8 mile came out.. SO FUCK THA HATERS... do your thing dawg

This was not a bad drop.......Pretty good drop.....................I liked it......U got wat it takes to become Ill....Just elevate...And Up ur Vocab

thanks y'all for your replys and thanks for advice from blunt mc. I'm now gonna work on whats been said!!
peace