Rhyme Off Da Mind |_ - Newb
 

Rhyme Off Da Mind - Keystyle

Brains constantly feeling like its faded /

Blowin' my brain out wit hot chromed gauges /

Is da only way from staying out of cages //

For da pages I script wit dis pen /

Startin' a lyrical assault towards da end //

Is all dat I do when paper's in fronna me /

But dats not all I do when I'm faced wit adversity /

I start 2 rip at ya bones just 2 see how ya chest will bleed //

Chronic neuronic lyrical metaphorical stimulus /

Filled and spilled, ready to rip it n kill it //

Sounds type harsh knowing that's how it is at dark /

Flippin' da script gotchu thinking that I'm uh spark /

Da gasoline to burn you up and leave ya ashes in da park //

Scatterin' over da basketball court up peoples noses /

Causin' breathin' problems bleedin' problems flowin' like hoses //

Never knowin' when I'm focused at killin' the one closest /

Its over cause I'm focused //



Old, but I put it up anyway................

This piece was Ill for a newbie..I was feelin it dawg,,,,,,Return da favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=54359

This piece has no special storyline, nor topic. It was straight off the head, I can tell 'cause you didn't follow any steps for creative writing. Try to keep your lines together, don't space it out like you did. Flow was off, not really any multies or anything special. Just rhyming words . . .

pZ!

krazy ill homie..i didnt even write shit this good when i was a newbie.....lol..im STILL a newbie...

Thanks 4 da replies people..........


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