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Niggas bout to get ripped like a paper shreda,
yall must be crazy if u think u can fight betta,
u bout to get smacked wita bat like a double heada,
dats fa any yall niggas dats tryna fuck wit my chedda//
yall niggas get Xed out just like a old fiance',
and left all by urself like destiny's child's beonce',
wut kinda rapper u think u tryna portrey,
it must be one dats about to die and decay//
yall niggas can see Red reighnin down on ur parade,
like da end of if "I Could to da world" by Bone Thugs N Harmonay,
it's R.O.T.C. yall niggas cant see our brigade,
cuz we startin to blow up like a mutha fuckin grenade//

Needs Improvement

ight

ok here the dealllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll lll

1) do not try and rap gangsta
2) try and spit about a top
3) do not talk about smacking killing people that much
4) spend more then 30 mins on a piece think about everyline u write
and then it might be appreciated by people


keep that in mind before ur next piece

ight Trill

or keep doin what ya doin and stay true to urself and perfect that style...

do what ya want.. needs improvement

Dats da best adice I got so far thanx

THIS WAS COOL MAN WASNT NOTHIN SPECTACULAR YA KNOW... BUT COO YA KNOW

See I hate dem fuckin Newbies...They always want beef wit veterans , , And what makes it worse is dat tha Newbies are whack as Hell..........Red Wun man u aint in my league dawg....I cant believe u made a Diss Open mic To me......hahahahhaha...Everyone said it was whack