Post #1...Lemme know watcha think
 

This is post #1, but don't call me a newbie
Your girl's screamin like BBD: "Pharaoh, do me!"
So sue me, or better yet peruse me
When I ask for a battle, most of y'all are gon' refuse me
Because my rhymes are bursting, lyrically dispersing,
chronic searching, alcohol immersing
so "pass the doochie to the left hand side" and -
don't hand it to me unless it's the kind
But you'll find, on the real I smoke anything in the vicinity
Wanna hot box? You're head explodes like John F Kennedy
Shit, Tony Montana ain't got shit on me
Fuck an eightball, I start my day out with a quarter key
Wanna snort some "C"? Bargain on your life with me?
Not a G, but I can still serve you violently
Crush your skull like empty cans of Tecate
Muthafuckas, I'll down you like shots of Jose!
But on the really if ya feel me we can pass the philly
Puff...Puff...Pass...until are minds are silly
Rat-Tat-Tat-Tat on the swine if they see me
No color lines, but I hate the boys in blue
Not the crips, it's the pigs I'm referrin' to
Krispy Kreme eaters - What the fuck you gon' do?
Chop you into pieces, recipe for pork stew
A screw is loose in my head
Toss and turn in my bed
It's obvious to see that I'd be better off dead
So lemme know whatcha think of this shit I wrote
I'm fiendin, so I'll end my first post on a high note

YOU GOT WORDPLAY BUT IT CAME OFF A LIL BASIC THE TALENT IS THERE BUT JUST NEEDS POLISHING. DO YOUR THANG THIS WASNT HALF BAD

Yo givin this props as a first post dawg,keep it up.

Peace

was a nice drop dun,was basic and needs up,but its lookign promising,nice lines throughout kripsy kreame eaters was funny...sound slittle gangsta but its all good,i aint into gangsta shit,but yaknow,each to his own no doubt,was likign it...keep elevating dun..



bismillah

It's hecka good... you'll get betteh and betteh...

Thanks to all that hit my shit up...all forms of criticism are welcome! I wanna maybe get into a few colabs or maybe a friendly battle, so anyone who wants to hit me up...Peace.