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stuffed in progressive lyrical tantrums
rythm oriented destiny doesn't invovle platinum
to celebrate my elevated inner sanctum
ryhmes we tag em bag em let loose like golden magnums
the cranium we draning them of all possible thoughts
kids confined whips and how they wrist gloss
and don't seem to comprehend that they're soul was bought
by the devil himself.. stuck attractin dust on the shelf
you rather have a millions then have knoweldge of self
i learned to splurge without money to burn
and i'm far from broke i got 2 jobs that lets me earn
about 2 g's a week
so yes i got dough.. most form selling yeyo
daily i hold enough pesos to take ya whole family to barbedos
for the weekend in a sequence of months at a time
so why must i encoporate my earnings on line
in a line that rhymes with the next line
truthfully i don't have the time
i rather visit the pyramids in egypt..
or roam the desert of the kalahari with the bushmin
on camel with no cushion
to train my body to take the harshes of reality
cause..
frequent casualties in frequency earns most salaries
in simpler terms kids kill their skill to pay their bills
on radio and care more about their acne
then to be excessvily and accessibly ill.
guess my public status matters
and my mind is worthless so might as well kill
it.



found this in my archives. haven't dropped a recent open mic. so here.. let the sleeping begin.



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nice multi's helped it flow smoothly, good vocab and rhyming...very hot. The beginning was real sound but near the end my opinion was that you went of topic a bit and sorta ruined the piece a little...jus bein real wit you overall:smokin the joint.
return tha favour on the link below...vote for who got the best verse.
~1~

me vs. Killa D

true^ i didn't even read it before i posted.. true.. let me edit it and perfect it...thanx for the feedback. sure to peep your battle.

shit sounds like it has a boppy kinda flow to it if you get wha ti mean haha..nice multies in here,i liked th epesos an barbedos line ,that was nice..real simple catchy type of peice butters.i liked the ending,the desert bulding yourself stronger,...and then the no rilly part,that was good.



bismillah

Descent shit
COulda been better here and there

I liked it yo.. flowed smoothly, had some a'ight vocab.. I think this the first time I've read any of your shit, I'll pay more attention from now on.. 1

yeah it was orgianlly made for audio.

changed the ending.. cause it was kinda off topic...

but hanx for the feedback.. make sure ya drop a link to your pieces so i can peep.

I was reading it, and I says to myself I says "this is made for audio"
because I didn't get the flow in writing. nice piece though, had a good message "where do you find the time? so many other things to be doing"

good piece buttersworth

i liked it .. but yea , it does sound more like an audio verse to me

this was pretty good. flowed incredible smooth,and basically i'll get straight to the point:
Basically every response up there is what would be involved.
you had a good finisher
and your whole rhyme scheme was crazy
i think it just lacked somethin from makin it a legend you know?
but if its for audio, then i'd like to hear it

Flow was rediculous, multi's helped with that though - i agree to putting this in audio with the Out De' Ville beat, this would sound dope!

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so yes i got dough.. most form selling yeyo
daily i hold enough pesos to take ya whole family to barbedos
for the weekend in a sequence of months at a time
so why must i encoporate my earnings on line

^ Aaaaaaahhhh! Nice line, flow was cool, constructed well. Only thing id cricise is the internals, you didnt seem to ahve that many, it might help to throw in a couple more, this wasnt a bad effort though.

Peep my piece 2Tell A Vision"

Peace!