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Confessions
yo this is my first post on this site, i'm far from a newbie, i been spittin for 4 years now, this is one of my most serious pieces, hope ya like and i'd like some feedback, holla at me
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ *door opens and you hear footsteps faintly then louder* *a door screechs open then you hear the church organ* *mischief is in a confessional* father i'm askin for forgiveness, for i don't know what ta do// my bitch start fuckin around and i confronted her and she sed it's was through// i swear all i want ta do, is fucking bitch her out and take her life// how and tha hell could me and this woman ever consider becomin man and wife// i went through all this strife, sacrifices, and abunch shit// and all that was goin through her head was how she wanted to quit// i can't believe i actually fell in love wit a semen suckin fuckin ho// i guess this is just some shit that all of us men will never know// how a woman can posess a man, it's so fuckin evil// i could never amagine my ass watchin her walk down that isle, in that church wit da steeple// she needs ta change tha way she treats ppl, or she end up lonely and old// all because she was so fuckin wrong and a heart that was always cold// she had secrets she shoulda told, but she didn't so we'll never b together// i guess to find real love u gotta go through all tha bad weather// *thunder and rain in background* i'm back father, now i know i was just here but i'm back again// i gotta get this off my chest and confess that i just shot and killed a man// heard he was tha one that was gettin wit my girl fuckin me over, and i saw him// so i looked into his eyes and saw death so i pulled out my 9 witout any stallin// like alicia keys he was fallin, after he droped i started kickin him and cussin up a storm// jumped his ass out on his own block didn't tell neone of his boyz so there was no warn// had no remorse left tha fuckin corpse out in tha middle of his street// tha only marks it had was a couple of sratches gun wound and tha bruises from my feet// tommorrow he'll be buried 6' feet deep, but thats another sin that's been committed// i might make a drive by tommorrow to his boys, well if tha weathers permitted// *police sierens and thunder in background* father i guess this is strike three for me, i have rly fucked up// remember me comin in a couple dayz ago and confessin about that guy i shot up// well turns out some how tha cops found out it was me so now i'm on tha run// damn, father help me, now how am i gonna try and explain this to my son// if they find me, it's an automatic jail sentence i think 25 to life// now how i'm gonna get a mother for my child and for me a wife// i shoulda thought twice but that fuckin bitch got into my head// but i still don't feel bad for tryin ta kill that bitch and for that ass that was dead// tha writin was on that wall i shoulda read, but i guess i just gotta keep movin on// i swear if i find out who told on me, when i see em i'mma explode on them like a bomb// but for my safety i gotta stay calm, but wait aminute wasn't u an old cop father// ya that's right u were, i remember now kuz i use ta date ur daughter// it was u wasn't it, i trusted u, how could u just go ahead and fuck me over// bout that time i pulled out my 9 and shot him just below tha left shoulder// *thunder and rain in background as Biblakul breathes heavily* |
GOOD DROP I FELT FEELING AND COMPASSION.ANGERNESS AND SADNESS...BUT IF YOU ARE IN A CHURCH WHY ARE YOU CURSING?
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thanx dogg but i know i was ina confessional but i was lettin go, common more feed back .....don't sleep
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I think you shouldnt post Poll's With Your Verses
dont do it again... -Sureal (Open Mic Moderator) |
aight kid, my fault i was just tryin ta get feedback, besides what u think?
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NEED FEEDBACK, don't sleep, kuz its pointless to post if u niggaz ain't gonna give me feedback
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Need FEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEDBACK, hit me up, common feedback, tell me what u think
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