Shattered dreams
 

something i came up with during the night. Please respond with what you think and some tips.

How many whiggas like me do ya see/
busting their rap on mtv/
hungry for fame but none know their name/
and craving for fame they smuggle their shame/
and pretty soon everyone comprehends their name/
as the spit in the underground
Waiting to be found/ becoming a hound/
so they put forth everything they’ve got/
put on the spot but there everything their not/
expected to be and their dreams break before being seen/
and they go home shattered /
Their dreams have been splattered/
On the pavement of hope/
So they turn to dope hoping to scope/
Out their problems with coke/
Till the OD on a drug called codeine/
And end up dead cremated instead/
And their remains scattered just like their dreams that were shattered.

RB Legend. .

need s alot f work

ya....i guess it does need alot of work. like how though, Why dont someone of ya gimme some tips and help than to just say it sucks or needs some help. People dont learn that way....

YET POTENTIAL WAS 5THERE INDEED

yeah i agree with word perfect you got potential. keep writing.

You Do Have Potential, But You Need To Work On Vocabulary, Mainly...

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i must say this was ok... i had to read this twice...lol, maybe cuz i was high